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Fine Feathers, Fine Friends?

A hundred eyes keep vigil
with overweening pride,
a tail fanned out in arrogance
for to catch a bride.

Displaying all his assets,
he primps and dandifies,
parading self assurance
as a female he espies.

A hundred eyelids flicker
airs and graces he displays,
she, taken by his flirting
yields to narcissistic ways.

His egocentric courtship
once over, struts away,
to leave his bride cold-shouldered
whilst he searches further prey.

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  • MagicLady silver member
    May 6, 2008

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    Those flirty pea(cocks) ... birds and humans have so many similar actions. That includes the ones who mate for life as well.

    The prized peacock feather is something that I used to have in my home in a bouquet of flowers. They are just so beautiful

    I like the line about " A hundred eyelids flicker", well done poet.

    Cheryl


  • fluffmarsh
    May 2, 2008
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    I enjoyed reading your poem. It is cute. ^_^


  • Shancy Fayre
    May 2, 2008

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    LOL, sounds like some guys I've known. Nice job. I love peacocks. When I was a young child, Dad would take my sister and me to a bird sanctuary where a peacock lived. We couldn't wait to see if that bird had his feathers spread. It was always nice when he did. I like your rhymint skill. Shancy.


  • Dorick
    May 2, 2008
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    Very Good! Great rhyme and rhythm.