Acrophobics on a tight rope, one inch off the ground.
anticipated serendipity, the deaf can feel sound.
acutely apathetic, because anarchy rules!
abundant spiritual poverty, monkeys can use tools.
balanced insanity, becoming partially undone.
just when they think it's over, it has only just begun!
so with apathetic interest and in my humble arrogant way.
i balance my own insanity, with a casual formality.
my heart is burning cold,
through colorless kaleidoscope.
because everything is lost,
since i gave up hope.
it's a comedic tragedy,
a Common abnormality.
for what goes up, must surely fall.
but when it's mother on the line...
no one takes the call.
consistently inconsistent, with critical acclaim.
explicitly ambiguous, pretend you're not the same.
diminutive giants, diligent in our sloth.
cheerfully cynical, the authentic replica.
binging on moderation, are the charlatans of truth.
abundant spiritual poverty, monkeys can use tools.
please proceed with caution, it is dangerously safe.
and if you're a deaf listener, something might just penetrate!
but use direct circumvention, from point A onto point B.
for doubting are believers, in divided unity!
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excellent write, kinda leaves me speechless, i'm really not to sure what to say. but i really like what you've done with the words, and the way they were put together was just beautifully done. Excellent pen:]
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very funny
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Wonderfully Done
"consistently inconsistent, with critical acclaim explicitly ambiguous, pretend you're not the same." I don't understand this part. Can you explain it to me? Remember that "your" indicates ownership where as "you're" is a shortened version of "your are." Or am I wrong? Or am I too picky? Of course, we never know what reality is. All stimli enter our heads and is filtered through our experiences and education and thus interperated
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thank u much for pointing that out
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great vocabulary... i liked it
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marvelous juxtaposition of opposites. great message as well. sometimes we really need to take a realistic assessment...it's not always a pretty discovery. but I still say I look cute with a hammer!
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Another brick in the walll....
Very Pink, Zen, Police like....Major cooooll
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A wonderful play on words. Yet a message so true within it.
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the question to what the human race knows will forever remain a rhetorical question, one we will never know the answer to only thoughts, feelings and ideas about the subject. Great write though!
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great job, loved it.
the flow was awesome.
you are a outstanding poet.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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A joy to read....Love it,,, ;O)
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david micheals stole the words from my mouth =)
I wish i could write like this. It's inspired me to write something of this sort. And really isn't that what we all want to hear? That our poems inspire people.
Well Done.
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i love the phrasing of everything you say!
Great job! What does humankind really know?
Absolutely nothing in comparison to what is out there!
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A veritable verbal cascade of oxymoronic opposites, and a really excellent poetic rant.
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Great poem! I love all the oxymoron's you have used in this! Witty indeed!
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Perhaps we have not evolved as far as we thought. WHAT AN AWESOME POEM!! Please excuse me, I'm going to go fling some poo now.
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you go, baby...front page~ woohoo ...well deserved...you are an unbelieveable wonderment...my, my...
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Very clever. It first impressed me as an intense, reactive write, but about halfway through, it seemed like you were just trying to fit in as many oxymorons as possible. Not that it's a bad thing, but it just changed the tone of the poem.
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lol you have a sharp eye
tis true certain oxy's were a must to drive home a few points. thanks much for comment(s)
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Them dangerous monkeys
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I love it the oxymorons are deep and i love the rhythm.
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it made me take notice, perhaps I will read more
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great write
i think this is really true -
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It seems you have a keen sense of todays world. And cannot a monkey be lead on a leash? Suppose Darwin is right. We, the new gods, truly in the shits. A must read, especially for our young. -
lol, I thought you meant oxycontin in your "sales pitch" for this... lol.
Anyway, I dug the meaning, but I though the flow suffered for the sake of vocabulary, to be honest.
Also, "becomming partialy"....
Did you do that on purpose?
It's a serious question... not being a smart a$$...
Overall, I dug it.
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The wordplay here is tremendous. Alliteration, rhyming, colorful interesting language and of course a healthy dose of oxymoron's served up extremely well.
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You should never trust a man who speaks words he does not understand, for the message may surely come of dark intentions.
Nevertheless, I loved your piece. It speaks volumes, whether you truly understand it youself or not. Fabulous diction. Bravo!
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I really enjoyed this read
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i really liked this.
i love that you used the feeling apathetic in here..
its got to be my favorite, nice oxymorons too...
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well written. verry nice job. haha I read it twice
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Awesome words
great poem
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A very ingenious poem indeed. I loved the whole piece with its magical rhyme and awesome meaning. I love oxy's and you certainly had that down pat. I agree that I believe people don't know as much as they believe. yes, Monkeys can use tools, and crows can count. We are not any smarter...dare I say animals have it over us in this respect. Just wonder what brought you to write this wonderful piece. Love it.
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wow, this is awesome, truly awsome. this is good reading. i love rhymes and if i didn't, this would make me love them. you are poetry in motion. i must look you up for some geuinely creative poetry to read. you and your muse must have been together a long time. congets it a marriage made in poetic heaven.
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hehe this is awesome! your rhyming in it is just superb, giving it a very catchy tone/rhythm. very enjoyable piece to read, thanks for sharing
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you have always known how to write expressively.. even though you used to always say.. "I can't write"
lol. well you can.. I really enjoyed reading this.. it's been a while so it was good to read something good from ya 
lol 
Angel
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oh ... lol just saw you ....
i mean your comment thanks hun much apriciated
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effective
I find that it is an expression, an afterimage of sorrow from a horrid event that could corrupt the heart of many a human being.
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I LOVE IT!!!!!!!
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I really REALLY enjoyed reading this. I don't run into a poem often that uses intelligent words and a rhyme scheme, and you did a wonderful job! I look forward to reading more of your works.
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Nice write.
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Superb plus
I love the wry, ironic, satirical humor of this write.
It is, indeed, most excellent in it's contridictions, which is what makes it hilariously funny. Thanks for the chuckles. I did a short write called Ele-Mental, which I think you might like. Here's a link for it: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2986932 -
Awesome job, great rhyming, wonderful poem
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I guess, the summation of the saying "Give me ambiguity, or give me something else." -
wow! i absolutely loved this! you have a very brilliant mind! this was complexly simple and yet simply complex at the same time =P the oxymorons were thoroughly enjoyable, keep writing! =]
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wow,
acutely apathetic, because anarchy rules!
this is my favorite line in the whole poem, but everything else is also really good. Good luck in the contest.
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This is more than just a rant for it has properties both in form and content that exceed it. Glad I found this. Enjoyed being on this page. Good luck in the contest. Take care.
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This is one of the best rhyming piece of work i have read here my brother..
I got 2 for one with the fine comment you left.
Free verse is usually what i like,
this is why this was such a pleasant surprise.
Great job.
Thank you for taking time from your life to read mine...
Time is the gift on this site.
Thank you.
Keep on pushin,
straight ahead,
Lowell Poe
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ahh the words. so wonderfully put together(or thrown, whatever floats your boat).
and everything rhymes! wonderful job.
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What an intoxicating collection of words. I love poetry that challenges my thought process and makes me consider alternative meanings. You have taken fairly well known (for the most part, although I don't mind admitting that I had to read this more than once to grasp a full story) words and spun them into something magical. My favorite stanza by a landslide is:
"so with apathetic interest and in my humble arrogant way.
i balance my own insanity, with a casual formality.
my heart is burning cold,
through colorless kaleidoscope.
because everything is lost,
since i gave up hope."
A tasty tidbit indeed. Although I do wonder if this was written stream of conscience or if you had to rework & finesse your original idea? In any case, brilliant!
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Very powerful write...my fav lines are,
"my heart is burning cold,
through colorless kaleidoscope.
because everything is lost,
since i gave up hope."
Keep writing, and I shall see you around the Loft.
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I really really like this. The concept of monkeys using tools is so true. Nice that they don't wear heavy tool belts though
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I don't know if it's the best one you wrote, but I do know that it's the best one I read so far! Beautifully penned. With words contrasting each other, in other words, oxymoron, being well placed, it does entice one to think deep about the situation. Unity and Division. Lovely piece of art! Keep it up!
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Brilliant.
Well penned. Loved all the contrast. The division and the unity all wrapped up as one. As we are one consciousness experiencing itself subjectively without conformity. Brilliant poetry. Thanks for sharing. You can spam me anytime
Anarchy is fun!
Creatress
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its a great poem!
its definitly one of the best i have seen today
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Very thought provoking write. I liked the "monkeys using tools". It reminds me of a conversation I had about trying to get the monkey off our backs. Eventually you have to kill the monkey. Nice work.
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I'm sitting here with a dictionary, your vocabulary far surpasses mine.
So I guess thanks are in order for prompting me to expand me vocabulary, and also for dropping me a such a great write to feed on
I love oxymorons. I was never great at using them, but writes like these hit me hard. I love having to THINK, and you made me do that. Each line...hell...each second word made me think, about your meaning behind it...if you HAD a meaning behind it...or if it just made sense in a nonsensical way.
I'm still trying to figure out what 'monkeys can use tools' means to you. I have my own interpretation, but as it's the main line, and the poem seems to be focusing around it, so understanding it is key to understanding the rest of the write using your perspective. And I have a feeling that your perspective will be most interesting to dwell upon...
On another (less important) note, I liked your rhyme, and liked the metre of the poem. Intensified my enjoyment immensely.
Thanks again
Take Care
Love
Sameh
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thanks
lol well i guess i mean that we are a bunch of monkeys
and well we think were much smarter than we are .. but then again this being an oxymorronic write... we also don't give our level or degree of intelligence enough credit sometimes ..
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Why oh Why
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yes come to think of it he may have been in the foreground of thought when i wrote this
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Wow, this is reall clever, and I really like it. great job!!
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Very creative and provocative. I like the twists and turns with words and my favourite line has to be about the monkeys using tools.
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Bravo
I really like it! It is so clever and complex! It make s you think! YOu did a wonderful job of pulling this all together......i love the originality!!!
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WOW! This is incredible. Truly inspired! You are a master of vocabulary. This is like a labyrinth leading me through varieties of puzzles craving to be solved! The layers are infinite, I could read this again and again!
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great comment
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i was impressed, a lot of smart lines in there, a lot of complex words, but binging on moderation has to be the best. good job
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Haven't I read this?
I did but the internet connection out here is aweful, and wouldn't let me comment at the time. I love all the contradictory lines. I'm not really sure if by definition they are oxymorons. I could be wrong. I'll look it up later. Regardless, this isn't your first that I've read. You're an excellent poet, and thi piece was no exception.
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I have to say this is very diverse, a real meaty read, I really love words, they make my tongue tickle when they bounce of my toungue, they make me feel alive in a way that humans can't, and this poem is a food junkies fix, great rhythm, great volcabulary, thanks, and thanks for your comments on rivers of milk I really value it littlefishone
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This is something that I've never tried reading before, lol.
My fav lines are these:
"my heart is burning cold,
through colorless kaleidoscope.
because everything is lost,
since i gave up hope."
Also:
"please proceed with caution, it is dangerously safe.
but if you're a deaf listener, something might penetrate!
use direct circumvention, from point A onto point B.
doubting are believers, in divided unity!"
I love oppositions! And you just gave me for the first time to read it in a poem, I got inspired as well.
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Wow. You spin the reader in all directions. Clever in a bizzare way.
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I smiled, laughed, and chuckled throughout this witty and insightful poem. It is a truly and delightful read!
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Interesting piece, nice job!
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This is amazing! What a brillant and amazing write..
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I have seen people in every way
I dont go by what others say of people around me everyday I love to find out for myself and often find others dont want help .But in my journey I take within their unshown personality tand then with a smile I so give it brings light to the dark place wich they live . Often people take on the style of life in which they were taught and how they were treated by those who knows them .Only I feel by making your own conclusions without the help of others often you can see the jewel within .I have a smile for everyone I see and meet and color has not bounderies with me for I look not at the color but the smiles I get in return .
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Wicked mate, Wicked!!
Just my kinda poem. I LOVE Oxymorons! I mean, look at my name??!!
Fave lines-
...through colorless kaleidoscope.
...a Common abnormality.
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please proceed with caution, it is dangerously safe.
but if you're a deaf listener, something might penetrate!
I'm lovin it!
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Congrats... Real masterpiece
You have a great style of writing (or at least with this poem) I really think its clever (especially that reference of deaf hearing the sound).
Clever write. Right.
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wow!!!!!
i like your use of words! man your the s#$t! this was great. i loved it. GREAT WRITE!!! love gypsyfish
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Nice job.
I liked your use of oxymorons in the first and third stanzas as well as the lines:
please proceed with caution, it is dangerously safe.
but if you're a deaf listener, something might penetrate!
use direct circumvention, from point A onto point B.
doubting are believers, in divided unity!
It reminds me of some rhymes that I heard as a kid.
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Wonderful flow to it. I like the pictures you create. Extremely skillful use of rhyme and metaphore. You almost don't notice either, the way the poem covers more important things, like interaction and seperation.
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Very intersting write indeed. something different, very unique style..great job!
Ruby
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clever......
What a write! I loved this....completely awesome....I am totally obsessed with oxy-morons, and I have been working on a piece like this (full of oxy's) except mine sucks and after reading this I must go scrap that piece of crap.
.....so besides giving me a complex about my own writing (Yeah...thanks a-freakin'-lot) I absolutly loved this, very intelligent and wise use of words...creative....fantastic...great....
all that good stuff.
Jamie
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Good
A very strong poem that pours out its confusion. Here you go shaking up the accepted norms in life and scattering the pieces for the reader to realign and define them. Your words graced the page with a flow of poetic wisdom and understanding. The playful manipulation of words is witty and cleverly arranged.
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phuckin' shred it...love love this...wow...i feel good.lol the title is awesome...your placement is flawless...wanna shout this one...you like to rip with words...i like it...you do it well.
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this poem flows really nice and i love how you used so many of those "oppisite words" i dont remember the term for them. this poem has tons of feelings and emotions and i love how it says so much, keep up the wonderful writing, -Amy
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oh yeah.. and..
they call em oxy-morons thanks 4 the comments hun
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a good piece, a great use of language here, showing the less is more mentality they are wrong lol a poem to devour with thought.
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Charlatans of truth
I can only tink of the worlds political process & the millions cheering on those... The blue bloods who hold distain for us
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What an ending!!!
A truly thought provoking write here. Excellent play on words throughout to intensify the flow. Informative, and clever, with such a vast consciousness, allowing the reader to not only ponder the piece - but to hopefully absorb even just a bit of the truth of wisdom within. It reminds me so much of the numbness people contort into reality. The struggle within duality of all sides. Great write!!!
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teddy...this was outstanding!!!!! i absolutely loved the contradictions in your lines..."cheerfully cynical, burning cold, and consistently consistent" -those were my favorite ones. i think what you did here with this one totally works and it screams individuality!!! your writes are so all in their own...nothing can compare or, is comparable!! great job
*rianna
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big words...my brain hurts...
but its a pretty cool write
peace, love, & cheese
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