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In paradise as stars are dancing.

Tasty smoke clouds billow
as we sit under branches of willow,
we share many a puff
smoking all our stuff.
Midnight, now hallucinating
In paradise as stars are dancing,
I trip into your eyes and we fall on the sand
no other night or ‘joint’ has ever been this grand.





Author notes

PROMPT --- Midnight's in Paradise of Pure Hallucination

I decided to take a bit of a humor but bit of truth to the subject matter..and also rhymed which isn't something I am normally do, so hope it doesn't totally suck..I guess you could say it is inspired from past experiences...naughty girl admits to maybe a joint or two in the past lol..

Just hope considering the subject..etc that it is taken lightly and enjoyed

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  • reckless abandon
    May 5, 2008

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    I like this, and I think the last line lets people know the slight humor taken in the poem. THanks for entering the contest.


  • penman gold member
    May 3, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    hehehe.. awesomenes Hmmm... reminds me of my childhood

    Cool write sis


  • poppa
    May 2, 2008

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    Ahuh ....knew you werent all toke toke pass, toke toke pass ....lmao..
    great write darl....good luck..

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