Alone and lonesome, since you’ve left your shell,
without your guiding candle, lost in storm,
this mystic soul, entranced in pleasure’s hell,
forgot that praise brings blame, and fruit hides worm.
You say I have to find the cure through pain,
give up my life, and join the Soul Supreme,
that suffering will break defense’s chain,
and inner gem will free from worldly dream.
Return, and break the glass-sheath ‘round my heart
that keeps me from uniting with the Friend !
I don’t know sweet surrender’s subtle art,
on boundaries of self-will, I depend.
You are my Mecca, splendour of the East !
Upon your Sufi-wisdom I shall feast …
Author notes
a tribute to the mystic sufi poet rumi :
oldpoetry.com/oauthor/show/Mewlana_Jalaluddin_Rumi
my other poems inspired by rumi :
"behold the jewel" http://allpoetry.com/poem/2116620
"rumi's imaginary letter to robert service"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2118386
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Nice to stop by!
and see what is in maa's world. I treasure the time that I read your poems. They always enlighten me.
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This speaks volumes. As stated by a yogi(I'm too tired to go look up his name), the journey of the soul's path to the Spirit begins with pain. I have indeed found many gems for my spirit soul through my fibro pain and my connection to the Universe has expanded beyond my imaginiation. I certainly connect to the message of our words. Love and Light Sharon
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I am not familiar with Sufi poets but that did not detract from this beautiful sonnet. The language was wonderful and your use of alliteration was masterful and not overdone. I enjoyed this very much. Peace, Liz
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Excellent. Your fist stanza just knocked my socks off and kept me tied to this wonderful sonnet. So smooth and flowing. Wonderful. Well done! 
~Pamela 
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Very good ...
but you do not need the comma after "say" in line 5. Otherwise, this a fine poem. Unfortunately, I have no clue as to whom you are describing. It might be helpful if you were to mention that in your notes.
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thank you so much for your precious advice ... I am still hesitating to put the poet's name in the author's notes, since I understood from the contest rules that the judges were to guess who we're writing about from the poem itself ... maybe a misinterpretation from my side ?
let's see ... I'm waiting for their feedback ...
all the best,
maa
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Glad you pointed that out.
I changed the title of my poem until the contest is over. -
After rereading the rules ...
I see what you mean. I just took it that the poet should not be named in the title, and never thought about it from that angle. -
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your interpretation of the rules make a lot of sense as well, jim ... thank you
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Somehow every religious philosopher must solve two questions, evil and suffering. Your subject says that suffering makes us vulnerable, so we seek rescue from the manifold sources of it in faith. There is substance to this argument - you relate it very well!
The other two Persian poets whom I know of are Khayyam and Hafiz - this one is excellent, but they are also worth a look.
The sonnet form is lovely, as you know.
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excellent~
Full of grace, beauty, and most of all charm
It's beautiful sis... I have only written one Sonnet here while I have belonged here on AP they aren't as easy as they look.....
This was beautiful.......I enjoyed it from the first stanza to the last...
Best of luck in the contest..
This is a winner in my book
Hugs n love
Susan~~~~
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I am foxed too. Is it Jalaluddin Rumi? Never mind - the poem is lovely.
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bingo ...
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A safe bet - the only Sufi poet I have even remotely heard of!
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This poem is a pure delight to read with the grace and charm that you are well known for. I'm embarrassed to say; I can't figure out who the poet in this poem is. I need a little help here.
Love,
Amera♥
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I am a lover of all things Sufi.....this speaks volumes to me. Awesome write, my dear little friend.
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thank you so much for your visit and most appreciated feedback, dear carol ... I am curious to see who will be the first one to find out which poet I was writing about ... any guess ?
marion
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