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Stand inside my Heart

The wind gusts fitfully baring a harsh cold edge,

That cuts like a numbing blade, jagged.....

Bleeding wounds that wont ever heal,

But covered by the dust thats raised.....

In swirling cyclonic torrents....

As the frigid demonic wind does its work,

Shrouding the light source already dim,

Making this wasteland more barren, more....

Like the metaphor of perfect desolation,

Though its imperfections make it so,

And the wain ghosts that linger on....

In the turbulance cold and dark,

Illusions of dreams caught in fine dust nets....

Of deceit and abandonment,

Remembered for their failure and pain,

Miserable knights of broken and forgotten...

Glories and ideals.....

That 'ere long passed into oblivion,

Though grand was their inception,

Mighty deeds came forth and here they rest,

Gone into the past like so many other....

Regrets piled high like bodies in times of war,

Ash that has mingled with the dust and wind,

Just another shade of grey that dwells here,

With forlorn ghosts and mispent actions,

Entangled in this morass....

That suffocates you....

As you stand inside my heart.

 

 

 

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i am my own despair

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  • xXCadyBabbiXx
    December 6, 2008
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    This is great, I love your language. I ca

  • blonde-beauty
    July 6, 2008
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    love it, very powerful


  • Mrs. Serial Killa
    June 28, 2008
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    wow very nice trophy, nice poem too


  • Rose-Petals
    June 23, 2008
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    Wow


  • Megan Awesome
    June 23, 2008

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    Wow this is really deep and really creepy. You weren't kidding when you said you write dark poetry lol. I love this.
    Megan


  • Mrs. Serial Killa
    June 22, 2008

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    Congrates on your victory wwith the gold trophy! i understand why you got it when i read this poem. NIcely written


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    This is such a brilliant write. I really enjoyed reading through this, although it was fulled with despair. I could feel this through every word here. Congratulations on winning the gold trophy, it is much deserved.

  • Bleached-Roses
    May 29, 2008

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    Wow. This is the first poem I've read upon joining the site and I must say that it's breathtaking. Full of emotions, pained and unrequited. Your language is exceptional. Your images are gruesome. You, sir, are a wonderful poet!

  • very nice poem


  • felixangel
    May 17, 2008
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    this is a great poem


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 6, 2008

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    Ahhh.... I feel you my friend! I am my own despair too.. and barren wasteland of regrets and forgotten ideas!

    This was darkly seductive to me in it's intensity and hopelessness.... excellent!! Well deserving of the Gold!

  • Damn. This one hit hard in its delivery. So very pained, weaving an intensity of lament for moments, fragments, and pieces of heart released to the changing winds of time itself. It is dark, but in such a very honest and bare since of self. I can feel this one, coursing deep inside. Excellent piece...


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    Dark perfection! never have i read dark poetry with so much imagery and meaning! I feel and envision every word as if it is inside my mind and alive!!! Thank you my Dark One...I love this.

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