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In The Beginning. . .

   

   in the beginning life is

   just base clay on a wheel

   pommeled and kneaded 

   sloppy, slippery, formless

   rising, coaxed, caressed, coerced

   and battered into shape

   tested in passion's all-consuming fire

   until worthy to seize and hold

   a wee bit of liquid grace

   poured unceasingly over us


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  • Billyjay
    May 13, 2008

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    Life is what we make it to be and your words make it possible for others to see that life is indeed in our own hands.Your words in reviewing my poems were gracious and warm and I thankyou for that.You have a beautiful heart !


  • faderman1959
    May 10, 2008
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    An excellent take on the picture! Great wording as always and wonderfully presented! Great write!


  • Carl W Harris
    May 5, 2008
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    Thank you Touchof1der for your most kind comments and warm welcome to the site. I appreciate your generous words and review very much. I will wander around the site and learn as much as I can. Carl.

  • Carl W Harris
    May 5, 2008

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    Ah, I found one of your poems, "In The Beginning." It is a very well written and expressed free verse poem and made excellent use of imagery in every line. I used to write free verse almost exclusively because it can be a most powerful form of expression, and that was well exemplified in your fine poem as well. Though brief, this outstanding poem makes in impressive impact on the reader. I especially liked the excellent phrasing of your two closing lines. Very impressive. Carl.


  • Jbthemilker
    May 4, 2008

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    Gold trophy

    Congratulations on writing the gold trophy poem for this picture prompt contest. If the truth be known, the other contest that I have running now is a picture of Magic lady. She is looking through the fence at this Canadian goose standing on a single leg. The two of us had a wonderful day at the Wildwood Wildlife Reserve in the capitol city of Pennsylvania, Harrisburg. We saw much of God’s creation and were able to capture some of it in digital images. The pictures we took that day have been the prompts for several contests. They have inspired many great poems. Yours was the best entry for the contest. Thank you for taking the time to write for this challenge.


  • Wandika gold member
    May 3, 2008
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    Wonderful introspectiive write

    Though I think at times I have been fired too hard.

    Jim

  • Rowan gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    What an interesting metaphor this is; I like the glaze part, I think someone forgot that step with me.
    All but my eyes... hehehe.
    Brilliant.


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    SO LOVELY!!!!

    We do indeed mold our lives as we go about our daily ways. Each and every day we learn and make mistakes.


  • FransB gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    Yikes!

    What wonderous words of life you have written. I found myself reading and re-reading this poem. Two substances: clay and water - both symbol of life. The test of fire rings true, but so the Potter who turns this life into "worthy to seize and hold". An enjoyment to us who reads this write. Best for you in the contest. Frans

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