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Charisma is a Weapon of Mass Destruction

Will it be in poetry smack downs
that we beat the other down
without saying things
out loud

in the open air
it's much too honest
and you have gotten it
out and down
in pen
and now
what is it meant for the other embrace?

it's only by mistake
that I've come so selfish and abusive
towards you
out of trying to appeal
I ruin another perfect day
with one more assaying
more misstep and now someone is running.

There is a barrel to my chest
with a creature standing over
the creature is me
and you are me and we are
all confused
as to what you're feeling.

The misdirection of intentions
balanced on an elbow.
Unreachable still,
the base keeps trying


I've come over still and it's still clutching
upon a silver twine
and the silver twine is still for me
and what was it you would prefer me to do,
because perfection is out
and friendship is still a trying

for if I can be clear enough to stop
being so childish.
This is a defensive apology
made in aggression
"I'm still sorry"

Things were so normal.
Things are capable of
being normal.
Things are plain and obvious.
We're so much alike
in too many ways
and the clashing effort
is to get things to be
the same.
Possible?
That's a 'least then likely' endeavor.
Normal?

It's harder still.

If the good intention is there
is it plausible to be enough?
Will a wound still be a wound if bandaged up?
Will salt out of paint
mixed with ink blots?
Will a negative connotation with a positive
anecdote about a fake boyfriend
be enough to swallow?
Will honesty too much honesty.

If you only knew that I am right there with you
and I'm more than sorry.
Will it be enough
if I go hanging my head
will it be enough
for plastic slip covers and your smiling grin

I'm more than sorry and it's all I can give.
I take requests:

if you want honesty,
you're honestly better than me in a lot
of ways.
Charisma is cheap and a smile is bought.
I've got a lot
of useless qualities.
For you I'll tone them down so you can
shine through.

For you I owe you a lot more than I'm capable
of giving.
For you,
I keep,
I keep
on trying.

But a ball can
only go so far
before it's a baseball analogy.

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  • Colossal Squid
    June 11

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    This is my favorite thing you have written and I have read. Maybe you have written a bunch of better things but I haven't read them and I probably won't.
    I like the part about wounds. I think wounds are still wounds after bandages when they are deep enuff to scar. Because a scar can be called a wound, and lasts long after it's useful to have bandaged.
    Also I am upset about how you having a life is eating up all of our internet social time.


  • sinkfloridasink
    May 6

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    ooooooo the ending of this made me smile . Such a nice poem you have here, it is nothing less than art in words!!! & Do not think im just saying this when I say this is a great poem...I anticipate reading more of your stuff...really I do, You displayed alot of talent in this one poem.


  • allmusicplayed
    April 19

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    well ok its verry good. id find it hard to balence misdirections of intentions on your elbow. isnt that what two hands are for

  • allmusicplayed
    April 19
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    what


  • Chainsaw
    May 4, 2008

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    Your use of mixed tenses, poorly structured sentences and bad grammar was really effective. It's a difficult convention to pull off, and you carried it out beautifully. Like this one:

    "Will salt out of paint
    mixed with ink blots?"

    And this one:

    "If you only knew that I am right there with you
    and I'm more than sorry."

    And this:

    "For you I owe you a lot more than I'm capable
    of giving."

    I love the lack of a conclusion, a "then_", in that second one.

    I can see that this one is personal, and that there's a lot of stuff there that only you will ever understand in context. It's always difficult to do such feelings justice.


  • Crowknows
    May 3, 2008
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    Good, really good

    This poem is very well written, I feel your emotions surging through the piece, an interesting form and several well developed and interesting lines like this one

    The misdirection of intentions
    balanced on an elbow.

    Call me a sucker for inside rhythm schemes, anyway the flow on this was excellent and the ideas conveyed were powerful. Nice Work.

    • Annexed Josephine
      May 3, 2008
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      that means a lot coming from you. thanks. there's a lot to this. a lot.


      • Crowknows
        May 3, 2008

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        the best poems are always saturated with memories and emotions, feelings thoughts and ideas make for a powerful piece, combining them with form and literary elements makes for great work.

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