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This Place

This place
It's like an emotional nudist camp
your arrive properly dressed
sensibly clothed
all your secrets covered

Then BAM!!
Your naked
Exposed
You look around at everyone else
No one's looking
No one cares
Because they're all naked too

And you can't help but purge
Its like when your sick
You feel like somethings not right
And then out of nowhere, unexpectedly
You vomit
Many times over and over
So hard you burst a blood vessel in your eye

But you feel better
For a while
Until next time



Author notes

By AusStar, I love this place, I so new here and I'm addicted. Its the best

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  • Simply Simple
    May 4, 2008

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    Interesting. You hit the nail on the head with this one. I really loved it. Thanks for sharing. But one request, put the position you'd like to hold in the family in your author's notes. Or message me or something. Thanks!


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    Damn! That's one of the best descriptions of poetry I've ever heard, and you nailed AP with the nudist colony comparison, too. It's frightening and liberating at the same time until, as you said, you realize everyone else is out there dangling in the breeze, too. Or wobbling, whatever the case may be. haha


    • AusStar
      May 3, 2008
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      Yeah, I must admit I do like this one. Its weird, I don't really remember writing it although I know I did, it sort of just appeared on my page, that probably sounds strange, but I think everyone here is a bit strange (and I mean that in the nicest possible way LOL)