Often I dream of us together forever, bonded by our undying love,
our fate would be held in our hands, our destiny has already begun.
Perfection would cling to us both, but apart, nothingness would take hold,
I've felt this buzz before, this strange sensation and that's how I know.
Before it ended with tears, that's not my hope for us; for I would give you my all,
For hours we'd converse about all our fears and our every wish and dream,
you would hold me in your arms and whisper in my ear the words I've always imagined.
Nothing would be able to tear us apart and the past would remain forever in the past
I'd be always by your side, even if darkness consumed your beautiful mind.
Test the strength of time we would even immortality would not be out of reach,
for when the earth snatches our lives we would dance as the breeze once did.
But there is more than two in this mathematical equation of ours,
she holds firm to your heart and proclaims her love of you, I know I can't compare.
But I know that she will never be able to love you in the same way that I do,
I don't believe in soul mates, but then again, I did find you.
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AWW how could this not win! NOBODY APPRECIATES GOOD POETRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ( I wanna go throw water in their faces!)
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ah crap! i wish you would have entered this in my last contest (which was about friends). too late now though.
anyway, you've done good with this piece. however, it pertains more to love and friendship than the world. anyway, best of luck and good write.
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! i l-o-v-e this poem! i really really do! its great, and ther is lots of emotion. i had a lot of favorite lines, but these were the best of all:
Perfection would cling to us both, but apart, nothingness would take hold
I'd be always by your side, even if darkness consumed your beautiful mind.
for when the earth snatches our lives we would dance as the breeze once did
these showed me the most emotion, so good job! i really love it. and thank you for entering!
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This is a very emotional and moving write. It is clear that you put a great deal of your heart into this. I love this line:
"for when the earth snatches our lives we would dance as the breeze once did."
Very well done.
CaliOkie
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whoa what an ending! "I don't believe in soul mates, but then again, I did find you." that line is such a killer babe! i know who this is about
o well your secret is safe with me... i can tell the emotion you have put in this... its pouring with it. Great work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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