Palette in hand
paint brush in other
he can hardly stand
with the pain he suffers
but the artist can't break away
from the things he discovers
underneath the shades of gray
within an array of colors
swift motions on the page
slowly come together
to an ultimate display
of a souls hidden treasure
glowing with the grace
of love that lives forever.
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Wow this is so awesome on every level. I love this form and rhyme scheme as well...it's rhythm flows flawlessly.
Love is an art, depicted and evolving within the views of the artist.
Well done!
♥
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NICE
Love is it.
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interesting
you express how an artist expresses their feelings through the elements of art, even at their darkest hour. nice imagery.
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Wonderfully expressed here Jason. I liked the words and the message portrayed. THANK YOU for making poetry come alive!
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Beautiful love it!
It flows great and the rhymes help it flow even more smoothly.
Favorite lines:
"but the artist can't break away
from the things he discovers
underneath the shades of gray
within an array of colors"
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Excellent write speaks so true. Loved the flow and rhyme. Speaks in volumes. Thanks for the share.
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I would like to be able to rhyme.. but I can't...I would also like to be able to draw and paint, but I can't...so instead i take to words! thank you for penning this piece.
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With so many comments already it's hard to say something that hasn't been said. Very nice write.
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Your flow and rhyme is great..
love how you took this... the title caught my attention.
You have capture the wonderful feeling of an artist as the search for that one perfect thing to paint.
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This was excellent poetry that represents an artist poet's mind. I was going to say the emssage was cliceh as people have described writing in an artist view yet however your rhyming did not feel cliche because you had "perfect flow." I think a little vocabulary in some places perhaps in one of the rhyming would give alittle extra yet nonetheless this poem was fair and decent. Excellent work. The title "Master peace" Ithough was a masterpeice line. It sounded very genuis-like and the emssage seemed to make me feel as if it about peace which no longer made me think it was cliche.
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BEAUTIFUL
The title sucked me in (very clever!) and boy am i glad! your words flowed with no effort and the rhyme was great, the message however..OUTSTANDING..
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Perfection!
absolute perfection
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A true power of the artist captured in this wonderful write also has potential metaphors as the search for peace of soul ...very life orientated colorful write poet
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Wonderful
A metaphor for life "...with the grace
of love that lives forever" Beautiful
Howard
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very nice
thats good
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kudos
lovely write. showing art through art is always wonderful to read.
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First impressions, an artist, deeper meaning, Life. You sail through the easy things but for something you really want and desire, you persevere for, and these are the "souls hidden treasures". A wonderful write, beautiful.
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EXCELLENT!
WOW!
I'M STUNNED!
I really love this poem!
Your imagery, rhyme and word-choice are perfect and are combined simply and wonderfully.
Really excellent job!
Just one comment.. I was expecting something different when I clicked 'cause your title is "Master Peace" I think you mean "Masterpiece" Unless you mean 'mastering all these elements to come out with a peaceful poem or combining them and they're at peace together' (just thought of that interpretation)
Anyways, I LOVED YOUR POEM!
So keep the good poetry coming
Nooni
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WOW what a wonderful comment, thank you SO much
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the rhythm and flow is nice and you painted quite the picture with your words. i am happy to have read this today. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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This poem flowed really well... I like!! It is truly an incredible write, short, simple yet strong!! awesomezz JOB!!
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Nice
I like the rhyme it flowed very nicely
I may be wrong but are you an artist or an aspiring artist?But this was very gracefully written.
Thank you for featuring and giving people a chance to read this.
Keep writing.
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An aspiring artist is still an artist
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beautiful
I love the rhyme
i love the flow
Oh who am i kidding i love it all
Very well done
Thank you for sharing
keep the ink flowing
Fire
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oh.. i forgot!
your titles are always awesome... i need to try that sometime with my own poems. just wanted to make sure i mentioned that to you... -
this was beautifully painted!!! finding colors under those shades of gray is such a treasure... i always like a masterpiece like this that is all pulled together at the end with grace and love that lives forever. can't beat that ending!
i really like your rhyming... even though subtle isn't the right word maybe...the rhyming seems that way because your words flow one into the next... like a non-stop story until i reached the end.
can you tell i liked this?
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beautiful, you're really good at making your poems brilliant by way of a little critique. sorry about the typo...awkward. um yeah. nice work, again.
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I really owe you for your little critiques, really makes me more satisfied with my ending result,
if it wasn't for them I may not have improved my work.
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Well, yeah, we're poetry buddies like that. smiles. my pleasure. not only that, it really shows your skill...I come in and say "what about this?" and then the next thing I know you've completely remixed it and it's crazy good. so yay.
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I liked this. The bird pulling out his feather at the end sounded a little crude compared to the rest of it. lol. but yeah, I could totally hear this one rapped out.
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