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Where Love is a Continuum

Expostulatory theology,
interpretations provoked
a nanomoment of doubt.
To question
brought recrimination
at my wavering faith.
An apostate moment
where the doubter
stands at the interdiction
of allegiances,
inducts him
or loses him
forever


Now,
I had to peel your sternum,
reach inside to touch
your phantasms,
to ensure
what my doubt suspected.
Where love is a continuum,
and a little
proves not enough,
the moment of seeing
inducts me
or loses me
forever.

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  • Blue Rew silver member
    May 3, 2008

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    Glorious! I felt mesmerized by the entirety of this
    far-reaching write. The repetition at both ends emphasizes the impact of hesitation and all that
    it speaks of within that tiny void. I especially
    felt: "I had to peel your sternum,
    reach inside to touch
    your phantasms"...so very potent in its intentions
    to focus the reader on what is being said & felt.
    Bravo for having this recognized with gold! Blue


    • runewalker
      May 3, 2008
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      Thank you Blue. I am humbled at your completion of the cirle of this piece. Thank you for noticing the structure and a grab phrase. far reaching is beyond my scope, but I am honored you thought so, especially as we stand in the moon shadows of your work. Thank you. RW


  • azure85 gold member
    May 3, 2008
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    Doubt from within, and the word selection enhances your poem greatly. Inductive and deuctive reasoning, doubt can pop up within any parameter set within the mind. "An apostate moment" is a great phrase, you wonder if Descartes thought this himself at one time or another. Thank you so much for your entry.


    • runewalker
      May 3, 2008
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      thank you for your kindness. There are many themes stemming from the concept and experience of doubt I like exploring. Thank you for the contests. It is well toiled field, with notions still to unearth.

      Most in the contest seem to focus on the disconcertion of doubt. I tend to think of it as a cleansing impetus towards discovery. But for any preferring and prioritizing foundation, belief, trust and things that convey a sense of reliability ... doubt can be disrupting.

      Thanks for the contest

      RW


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    I can't find the right words to comment on this... other than to say I think it is a piece of amazing depth and thought!!!!

    You know I love it!!


    • runewalker
      May 2, 2008
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      you J are always so kind. those of us who have been in these spaces know what a powerful provacature is doubt, how she can fling us down an icy slope with crushing persuasion.

      Thank you as always for reading.

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