The little girl with the sad eyes
Gets up every morning and tries
To make sense of things in her life.
All of the despair, all of the strife;
Often she feels so lost and lonely.
Longing for harmony, thinking if only
She could be as happy as the others;
The fathers, the children, the mothers.
Tears roll slowly down her pale face;
Convinced that she's just a disgrace.
The little girl hungers for a better day
But who has temporarily lost her way.
Author notes
This poem is based on a picture prompt in a contest by Lil-Bit Crazy.
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt 15*20* by Lil-Bit Crazy.
1000 points, ended May 2, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - all HM winners! by Cat10.
850 points, ended May 19, 47 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Good write here
So often harsh words spoken to a child stay with them forever for the parents are the first ones to tell them what they think .
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Yes. Sometimes the earliest wounds produce the deepest scars.
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thanks for entering! I really like this poem! nice rhymes and I can really relate! good job! and good luck!
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Thank you for putting up the contest.
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WOW! This one really got me. Reading it was like reading about the little girl inside of me, how I used to feel...how I still feel now at times. You've done a great job with this write. Congratulations on the HM...very deserving.
Hugs, Annie
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Thank you for reading. I used a combination of the picture and the contest writer's poems to get the feeling. I think it is a very sad poem.
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Tears roll slowly down her pale face;
Convinced that she's just a disgrace.
great job on pic.. thank you for entering.. so few words but powerful..good luck..! -
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Thank you for commenting and awarding me an hornorable mention. I am glad you liked it. :}
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Wonderfully done with the prompt my friend. I really like the way you expressed your idea of what the sad little face was feeling. It tugs at one's heartstrings. Great job Chucky!
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Thanks. I am glad you liked it. I agree it is a sad face.
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nice job
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Thank you for reading.
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Nice rhyming
Such sad imagery. Very well done.
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Thanks you for your comments. I think the picture that the poem is based on is a very sad picture.
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This is just beautiful, a strong write my friend
BRAVO
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I am glad you liked this one. It is hard to write from the perspective of the opposite gender, but it was an interesting poem to try.
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Excellant
A very good write, indeed. Your imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. I really like it just as it is. Thanks for sharing this one.
. Rewarded 4
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Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
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Wow beautifuly written...a strong and honest piece. Smooth and perfect. I know that feeling all too well...great job and good luck with the contest.
. Rewarded 4
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Thank you. I can relate to the feeling of sadness and lonliness that I saw in the picture prompt, but I can only guess how a girl/woman might feel.
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great hope for those lost now thats its possible to be found
great write
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Thank you. The picture is a very sad powerful piece of art.
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Very Very Good
I don't see many writers that can put so much into so little of words. You do have a way with words hope to see more of your work soon.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I have not been doing this for long, but I find that it is very relaxing.
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