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Baby Lilly

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Baby Lilly

Lilly arrived through the window of dreams,
while angels played harps descending on Earth.
She lit up our lives like woven moon beams.
Lilly arrived through the window of dreams.
She’s the binding thread of love in extremes
and gave us a purpose proclaiming our worth.
Lilly arrived through the window of dreams,
while angels played harps descending on Earth.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Triolet:

A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.

Make writing a Triolet more challenging! Make each line 8 syllables in length (4 metrical feet),
written in iambic tetrameter (the more common way), or try it in pentameter (English version)
where each line only has 10 syllables(5 metrical feet

Art Work by: White-Pegasus

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  • Andre ben-YEHU
    June 7
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    Sublime...


    "Baby Lilly" was duly feasted in a TRIOLET of the Poet's heart, and from the Park of love everyone marveled observing the dance of a great Quill on clouds of sublimity.

    When the literati wakes up they can say like me, EUREKA! Here we have found a true PULITZER PRIZE RECIPIENT!

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Desire gold member
    May 4, 2008

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    Oh My Word!!

    Wowzers this is another Beauty and swells the eyes Beautiful~
    I imagine the proud parents smiling after inhaling Your words!!
    Wooooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
    Love the energy in all Your pieces
    and the forms too~~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • HaleyMary
    May 3, 2008

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    Beautiful write. I liked the part of angels playing harps. It gave the poem a peaceful feeling to it. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

  • Paula Pears
    May 3, 2008

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    What a lovely poem for a new baby. In a beautiful form, I have been trying to write rhyming forms but I cannot make it beautiful like this.


  • maa gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    this triolet touched me in particular ...
    probably because of the childlike innocence and purity I felt radiating from your verse ...
    a true masterpiece, simple and caring ...

    much love,
    maa


  • myrataal silver member
    May 3, 2008

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    I loved this as I love all of your work.

    I can truly say there is not ONE of the pieces I have read, that I do NOT love. And, as my friend Ken says, LOVE is such a STRONG WORD, Myra ... USE IT SPARINGLY.

    And I mean LOVE.



    Love
    Myra


  • PerVirtuous
    May 2, 2008
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    Dreamy. You have captured the essence. I smell gold here. I love it and I love you.


  • StarEyes
    May 2, 2008

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    *Sigh* What a beautiful read this one is!!! I adore it!! You make all these forms look soooooo easy I don't think so... But watching you, they sure look that way!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!


    and love

    Nyetta


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 2, 2008
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    Beautiful poem, and I'm sure baby Lilly will be beautiful enough to justify it!

    My babies are a little too large to ask for similar, BabyTerry is 6ft 1 and will be 26 next month...


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    It drifts away from its iambic moorings in places, but it is still a sweet poem. Do well in the contest, Sis.


    • Amera gold member
      May 2, 2008
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      Thank you! Are Triolets susposed to be iambic?

      • cricketjeff gold member
        May 2, 2008

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        No idea about supposed to be but oodles of triolet aren't!
        The one I know best is wassernames "TO a fat woman seen from a train which is decasyllabic but in tetrameter


      • Mairi bheag gold member
        May 2, 2008
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        According to your notes, Sis, yes.

        • Amera gold member
          May 2, 2008

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          iambic tetrameter; this is pentameter, never thought of using iamb. You dream in it so I guess you notice right away.


  • Lexie - gold member
    May 2, 2008
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    BEAUTIFUL

    But then i expected nothing less from you,
    thank you hunny


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 2, 2008

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    Pure beauty is this!

    I have figured you out. You are a poetic physicist. You take the rules of poetic form and create heavenly beauty.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    This is a beautiful piece you penned my sweetheart.
    Lovely. Thanks again for lifting me.
    I love you

    Tory

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