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Croco-dilly Man O Man

My momma often spoke in dreams
Mixing potions and riddling themes
Black cat fancy and black-eyed peas
My daddy went a walking
In a winter freeze

Folks said daddy was a no account man
Who crawled inside a bottle, I didn't understand
Left home when he was sober as a solemn judge
Ended up in Tulsa gunned down for a grudge

I was twenty-one when I hit the road
Headed up the river towards old Jericho
Left momma with her potions in a wooden shack
Looking for my fortune, ain't no turnin' back

[CHORUS]
Found myself with strangers in a old ghost town
Sharing bread and coffee at the Blue Mambo lounge
Christmas lights burning like an old juke box
Sweet Jesus, I need saving just to break this lock

Not far out of Biloxi I was working hard
Cutting up the timber in a timber yard
Pennies in a bottle is all I got
Ended down in Memphis selling penny lots

Fought to make a living in a revival tent
God was just a nickel, all my money spent
Tangled with the preacher with his liquor nose
I hit him with a bible just to steal his clothes

Slept underneath the bridges on the Mississipp...
Hiding in the shadows and right out of it
I can see the city sprawling like a crocodile
Been away for so long and a little while

Now down in Alabama is where I'm bound
Tied up to a chain gang for being so down
Payin' for my sins just like a preacher man
An' all I see is momma doin' what she can

'coz she knows from all her visions just where I am...

[CHORUS]
Found myself with strangers in a old ghost town
Sharing bread and coffee at the Blue Mambo lounge
Christmas lights burning like an old juke box
Sweet Jesus, I need saving just to break this lock




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  • Ami
    July 6

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    loved the chorus love reading lyrics! do you sing your own? Either way great write!

    Thank you so much for entering my contest and
    Good luck!

    -♥Amy♥

  • the evil angel
    May 6, 2008

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    I like the way you split up the verses. It makes it flow more easily. There are a few grammatical errors, so you may want to look it over again and fix those. I like the way you used allusion. It really enhanced the picture. there are some interesting phrases that really pop out. Well done


  • Topaze gold member
    May 6, 2008

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    Nicely done a very good folk / country tune. Great use of phrasing and descriptive to boot. My best wishes in the contest.


  • Cesarean
    May 1, 2008

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    I love works like this, the voice and the rhetoric are amazing and the chorus fits with the rest of the story of a youth struggling in life. Good luck and thank you for sharing!