How can I share my doubts with you?
Give them the power of the page
when I fight them, everyone...
I will find my destiny...
I will learn to be loving, and sensitive
I will always leave someone feeling better
I will never fail the people who count on me
I will never be violent again
I do believe my prayers will be answered
I will be successful, so I can help the needy
I will learn to be content in the quiet times
Though I so sorely miss the times God has taken me
into his confidence, and showed me his treasures
Of his children's hearts and sang with me
A contest entry
- Doubt by azure85.
600 points, ended May 3, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the realness of this. I like that it 'speaks' plainly about something we've all felt at one time or another. I mostly like that you express a positive attitude - looking 'Doubt' straight in the face. Good job with this subject.
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This is a list poem and they have been some of the best over history that there is. I can see you have calculated what will make your existence better. I'm not sure it will or if they will ever really take place. I don't write for contests so I don't know if this is you or filling the criteria. Either way, your good. RC
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I don't think any exotic dancer felt more exposed than I did posting this. Does that answer your question? I have learned that when you recognize your bad, inadequate, or selfish behavior in the moment, even if you don't win that particular battle, you have turned a huge corner in changing! I write for contests for the ability to customize my pieces. I have a memorial poem for my mom called "The Talisman Root" done in black, print in blue (sad metaphor) with a border of talisman roses, which were her favorite. She died at valentines day and the florists were out, save one spray of red roses. They changed overnite, in the fridge, to talismans. I wrote a poem for Vera about her cancer battle, that was DQ'd as not pertaining to the contest! apparently symbolism wasn't appreciated! It is called Crop circles on a random planet". We talked about Chernobyl in Russian being the English "wormwood" (shades of the Apacolypse?). She translated a work from the 1930's that said "Belarus, you are the rose that will not be choked by the Chernyobl...
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Very good poem and a great take on the prompt. The thoughts of doubt, the reflection on many positive actions, and the closing stanza with remembrance of things that will be missed. Every line contains something to think about, thank you so much.
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Those
are some serious doubts.
A good entry into this contest.
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