Lost in a reality that can't be
teardrops stain satin dress
and things become a mockery
life slowly starts to digress
Dark lies and bloody lips
smooth together in violent rage
fueled by alcoholic eclipse
feels like being stuck in a cage
Isolated from the friend
Lost! Alone! Battered! Bruised!
life seems to break and bend
Lost! Alone! Battered! Used!
Hopes been beaten black and blue
(Chorus)
Pick Yourself up young lady
your life been in shambles lately
But all in all its okay
Just pick up the pieces and
fall away
OH, Pick up the pieces
my sweet, sweet
Cassandra
Again the time comes around
your body strikes the floor
mistakes like this keep you bound
anger bursting from the core
Soundless tears pour down your cheek
still it keeps coming back to this
a constant beating week after week
soon you'll fall through the abyss
Lost! Alone! Battered! Bruised!
Lost! Alone! Battered! USED!
LOST!!!!ALONE!!!!BATTERED!!!!
So very fucking CONFUSED!
(heavy guitar solo)
"Oh Cassandra" (repeat throughout solo)
(Guitar solo fades into drum crescendo
right into the final chorus)
Chorus x2
Are you broken, battered, and used?
Author notes
This song I just kinda went with an idea and ran with. I'd really like to know what you guys and girls out there think of it.
definitly a Metallica type sound to it.
A contest entry
- Asleep In The Arms Of Anger by Redrusty66.
500 points, ended May 6, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Good rhyme and meter, also very nice play of words, lots of synonyms creatively used. Strong song.
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Intense!
Dude It was crazy! I especially loved the: "Mistakes like this keep you bound" That line made me shiver! wow!
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Great construction and musical direction. The wordplay and rhyme scheme were excellent and would make an awesome song. The Rasmus, HIM, Courtney Love...all could do it justice.
Thanks for a great read. -
Wow...
This is amazing... I was in a trance the whole way through. I'm so pleased I read this, it is so powerful... Well Done ... ((Rach)) x
Maybe you'd like to check out some of my Poems x x
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Hmmm...
Me thinks that this is maybe supposed to be a ballad, but I read it like metal none-the-less, and I must say, except for the last line, I think it has mucho de potential, friend. lol.
My rating, sweet action.
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