As a field of flowers
are you, the hill and cleft
I run down, a breeze
dislodging floral breath
swirling skyward in scents
of yellow, orange, and blue
your eyes, the sky,
and hair in golden clouds.
Naked earth of you
shaded brown and tan,
sun warming in your smile
soft hills of your lips
dewed by Spring rains
hips, shoulders and chin
granite just below the earth.
Your warmth in lusty flower
flowing over hill and valley,
voice whispering between
the blades of grass
lying under the sky,
a gentle afternoon of you
brings with it soft rains.
You are and will ever be
the earth and the sky.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspirational by Kelli Marie.
2300 points, ended May 15, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You have been referencing nature a lot in your poems lately.
I notice a continuous use of the earth and sky. The earth is grounded, solid, and its limitations are known - indicative that there is a sense of stability (or want thereof) in your life right now. The sky, on the other hand, is limitless, exhilirating, and enchanting - this indicates (to me) an openness to new ideas and experiences.
I think you are at a point in your life where you are satisfied and secure with who you are, what you have, and what you have accomplished - but at the same time, you are experiencing a desire to learn and try knew things. I think you have realized that this is just the beginning for you... that there really IS life after retirement (which is such a difficult concept for most new retirees to grasp).
Impressive write.
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An in depth comment full of insight. You know me better than I know myself. You do that so well.
Thank you for your kind words.
Garrison -
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Well I learned from the best, now didn't I?
You're very welcome, friend.
Allie
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WOW!!!!! This is just amazing!!! The imagery, the flow, the presence itself - has floored me. What an endearing sense of love in all its wonder. Your words are so well chosen to convey these affections of heart. I loved this!!!!
"You are and will ever be
the earth and the sky."
This is just beautimous!!!
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This was a very nicely written piece of poetry. Love the imagery. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
Kelli -
I read this and thought it was awesome. Then realized there was a picture for inspiration..I was blown away when I saw the picture. Your words bring this picture to life. The visuals you offer the reader are outstanding.
A wonderful piece of writing. Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
Noreen
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I think there are some words ...
you ought to remove from your Author's page ... for you work are simply divine!
This poem is breathtakingly beautiful. It truly inspires me to write ... Ah. Timeless, yes, and fragrant in its tactile presentation. WELL DONE, Garrison, and good luck in this contest.
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Wow, this is very nice, I like how loving and beautiful it feels. The last two lines pretty much summarize (very well) the concept this poem is focused around. I truly like this. Especially, "Naked earth of you" - such a nice image
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OH wow, that is so beautiful; I love the simile in it. If only all men thought this way…
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Gorgeous!
I love that ending! This is a timeless poem... one that could be read in any era, in any culture, and still have the same intense meaning.
I really adore the way it is grounded in earthy imagery. A perfect poem for spring! You and I seem to be thinking alike: with everything coming to life, growing and blooming all around us, it is impossible not to be in love with it all.
As always, it is a pleasure to read your work.
I'm waiting (not so patiently) for more!
Allie
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this is an absolutely beautiful bouquet & poem..I am trying to pick a favorite stanza..but every one is wonderful & sensual...I love this...best of luck in the contest
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Thank you for giving me your great suggestions. I have incorporated them in my poem and I feel it is better for them. Sometimes I don't see the forest for the trees.
Thanks,
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Garrison - you're welcome...any time
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