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But of what?
And when?
When did the days turn to weeks?
Then the weeks into years
And when did the essence of obtainment
First provoke fears?
There’s a realization in here…
An illuminating palpitation, that radiates its’ cares
My heart—it made a ‘come-back’
No longer blocked
No more stopping its’ flow
There was a lot of pressure on it
But the hearts truly know…
My heart dropped one day
From its’ lessons, I grow
I’m going for purity and that’s all I can say…
In a list
A contest entry
- ATTN: Spiritual SOULS*****SPLENDOR....Our Creator says we are his splendor! DEFINE YOUR SPLENDOR...... by ears2hearyou.
1200 points, ended May 12, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well done, poet. Keep writing. One.
Dez
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beautiful !!!!!
This piece is very moving. i love " My Heart made a come back... Powerful!!!!! Love it Love It!! -
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Thank you very much. So glad it touched you. Thanks for this visit and this great feedback.
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Poetic beauty to the eyes and soul
ANd yes sometime we dangle...in life...and thankyou
for this has really helped me to understand,
the splendor of being who we are...and how wonderfully
it is we are n ever to old to learn!
(thankgawd!)
ears/Seattle
well done...loved it!
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Well...thank you very, very much. I wasn't sure if it was what you wre looking for; decided to enter it anyway (on the footing that if it's DQ'd as an entry, it still might have relevance for someone in respect to how others see the world). I appreciate your review hear and the reflection. Glad to know you loved it.
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Amazing!
I absolutely love how you did the beginning of this piece! I love how you took the word "dropped" and made a "curtain of words" out of it. You are so creative and talented, Dear Poet..
"But of what?
And when?
When did the days turn to weeks?
Then the weeks into years
And when did the essence of obtainment
First provoke fears?
There’s a realization in here…
An illuminating palpitation, that radiates its’ cares"
This piece is so powerful and emotionally stirring. The combination of the imagery and the rhyme in this is so beautifully done.. The above lines are exactly how a lot of us feel when we start to realize we aren't kids anymore. But I see it like this, if you never forget that feeling of being a kid, you can be a kid in your heart forever..
"But the hearts truly know…
My heart dropped one day
From its’ lessons, I grow
I’m going for purity and that’s all I can say…"
I think most of us, especially children (or children at heart) want purity for themselves. It is so hard to achieve that in 'this' life. The heart knows more than we give it credit for, and if we would just listen a little more carefully, then we could achieve that ever elusive purity.. I love this piece so much. It is so beautiful in presentation and in the message within it. Bravo, bravo, bravo!!!
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How do you suppose I can possibly respond to this comment? It's full, stuffed with compliments and gratitude. I'm the one amazed here. You have honored me once again. I am at a lost for words...thank you so much.
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Astounding!
Oh man I don't know how to describe this feeling! wow! Atop five fav. for sure! great job my brother.
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Hey, thanks for the huge compliments. I'm touched by your feedback.
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