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the warmth of god's quilt,

     the comfort of angel's wings,

- his beauty endures,

                    ....forever -

 

painting heavens face,

     dropping buckets of new life,

- lift your hands in praise,

                    ....forever -

 

melody of truth,

     symphonic colours in tune,

- heard by his children,

                    ....forever -

 

he prepares a place,

     he has built for us, mansions,

- it's time to look up, believe,

                    ....forever -

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The east side of the Carrizo plain, in the Temblor   Range,

  about   50 miles due west of Bakersfield ,   California .

 

Photo taken by Barbara Mathews

 

 

 

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Haiku-tuut

 

Syllable count:

 

5-7-5-3

5-7-5-3

5-7-5-3

5-7-5-3

 

Form Credit:

 

Arkbear

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  • Bad Bill
    May 15, 2008
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    Congratulations, Arkbear. Your lovely poem is a worthy winner.

    Bill


  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    A beautiful write. Very nice metaphor. Lovely depth of feeling. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice and nice assonance. Your faith shines in this piece. Congratulations on winning Gold. Well deserved.


  • Truetome
    May 14, 2008

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    beautifully written. I really enjoyed the softness of this poem and at the same time a confidence. great work here.


  • Kelli Marie
    May 3, 2008

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    This is a lovely write, and I love the form. Beautiful presentation. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
    Kelli


  • smiley
    May 2, 2008

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    TEN THUMBS UP & 25 APPLAUSES

    I think that this one of your best pieces yet.. I am so in love with this one.. I has touched me tremendously.

    Yvonne


  • ennovy silver member
    May 2, 2008

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    Bear your words could be inspirational lyrics, as I read i could almost hear an angelic chorus singing in sweet harmony.....Like a very soft prayer of thanksgiving......amen...I love itnovy


  • Poesing
    May 2, 2008
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    As usual, great job. Love the gorgeous picture, too!
    God bless.


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 2, 2008
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      Hi Bleep ~

      Thank you for stopping by and leaving your mark of kindness,

      ....may God bless you today and....forever,

      Bear ~


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 2, 2008

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    Most wonderfully and beautifully written, my friend
    A fine sharing in this contest
    Wishing you all the best!
    Love, light, and happiness to you,
    Sandy


  • Malabu
    May 2, 2008
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    lovely form of prayer...and form poetry

    • Arkbear gold member
      May 2, 2008
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      Hi Sis ~

      It is so good to see you again....our paths have went in different directions as of late.....so good to see you!

      God bless Hun,

      Bear ~


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 2, 2008
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      Thank you Mal ~

      Very kind of you to stop by,

      ....have a grrrreat weekend and God bless,

      Bear ~


  • LadyDementia gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    Wow, would love to be there A divine poem, with gorgeous imagery. The form is flawless, as is the flow. Certainly adds to the beauty of that picture. Wasn't to keen on the word bucket but other than that a superb piece, good luck in the contest

    • Arkbear gold member
      May 2, 2008
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      Thank you Pink ~

      The word *bucket* refers to paint buckets for the colors of life......but you're right, it does seem to, go outside the Tone set withing the other Ku's ~

      I knew someone smart was going to see that...hehe ~

      Have a grrreat weekend and God bless,

      Bear ~


  • NeonRose
    May 1, 2008
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    Beautiful form, beautiful words..you've done it again, Bear.


  • StarEyes
    May 1, 2008

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    My Dearest Uncle,

    Your words are truly as amazing as the picture!! WOW! I, for one think your words only add to the beauty here!! I would love to see that! That is most exquisite!! Just amazing!!

    Best of luck in this contest! (personally I don't think you need luck though, this looks like a gold to me!!)

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Tears of Roses
    May 1, 2008

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    Superb Bear
    Filled with love and grace.
    Many Blessings of Love
    Roses to you

    Teresa


  • thelordreigns gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    The picture is beautiful and the verse are superb.


    - joanne -

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