Bared myself to love
falling rain cleansing
my painful past
smiles for
my only salvation
Then...
Broken promises crushed
by your weight
my perfection you write
will never be high enough
for your dreams
Clothed in others shame
you made me a princess
fire from your mouth
i choked on the smoke
dying again,whithering
The white rose turns dull
covering sin with sin
once again controlled
by mans will
she remains in her own
sympathy's tears
If touched now
the flower you had
would crumble to tiny pieces
dropped carelessly to ground
for the water given her
was impure self seeking
Trusting no one again
walk upon her soul
under your footsteps
she remains in dried fragments
dusts of bittersweet love
Author notes
There are two side to every bittersweet love story
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This was truly a wonderfully written poem... It was full of emotion. It brought tears to the eyes.. The image that you painted was painful yet you created it so beautifully. I really loved this.. Thank you very much for sharing.. I wish you the best of luck..
Angel
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What a masterpiece of beautiful sorrow, reading this painted a visual in my mind, of teardrops falling onto a bouquet of dried roses. a very stunning tale you have penned here. ~Bret~
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Hi Lisa,
I once heard it said that at least half of why we fall in love with someone is because of the way they make us feel about ourself. (It stands to reason the same would be true for why someone falls for us; we make them feel good about who they are, beautiful, cherished...) I know it's been true for me, and maybe there'll be truth in it for you to ponder as well.
I can feel the pain in each of your words, for few of us are strangers to heartbreak. I wish you peace, comfort, strength, ability to see the beauty within yourself, and someday when you're ready for it, the love you truly want and deserve. I also hope you can take the good things you did have together, remember them with fondness, and know you gave someone else a special appreciation of himself, if only for a while.
Peace and Blessings,
~J.
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very true...there are two side to every love story...just try to find 'peace in mind' and happiness for your loved one, even you cant live together for some strong reasons...
hope everything will turn good to you.
thanks for sharing this heartfelt poem
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Dear Lisa...
Your expression of your pain goes deep to the soul of the reader. Such a sad yet beautifully penned work here. I have nothing to comfort anyone with except my support and love. I wish you healing.
Love You~
Sue
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I could wish that no woman ever experienced such selfish treatment and outright scorn from us as men. But to teach my son to behave in a manner befitting nobility is a step in that direction. Great piece.
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deepheart
I hope all men read what you wrote about teaching our sons.
Its a start and an inpiration!
Thanks for being so honest in what you said and for reading me.
Hugs
~Lisa~
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This is a great poem.
What was your inspirstion for writing this?
Would you mind if I put this poem in my first book?
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Gods Lil Warrior
Thanks for readind and wow what a compliment.
I wrote you personally.
My inspiration real life..and heartbreak
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very well done. I like the word choices.
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J. M.
Thank you for liking my words
~Lisa~
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Your words are a thank you enough.
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Lisa, my sweet friend, this so heart breaking, I relate to this so well, you wrote what I never could quite express once, so perfectly. I think the key is, is feeling like a princess, a flower blooming bright, strong, all on your own, and then, one day, it will be noticed, appreciated and loved, but if love fails again, as it so often does, you are still in full bloom, as you are your sun and water, he will have been merely a wonderful admirer.
I wish you well my dear. You will see hope and light again.
love and
sss
Michelle
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Michelle
My princess days are over, My heart still breaks for a love i thought to be pure then relizing i was doing things again.
I take some responcibilty for my actions as well.
Being in love was a great feeling but knowing that the love was maybe just a dream and then i woke up ..has broken this soul.
One day i will feel pure rain on my face and the Son shine will dry my tears.
Thanks for reading
Love
~Lisa~ss
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Lisa, at 52 years of age I have just had my heart broken again by someone I realise never did deserve it. I bloomed in his presence and thought it was because of him when in fact it was despite of him. I recently allowed myself to wilt and realised if I do that now, I never will bloom again because time can be unkind. 'Gather ye rosebuds while ye may' enjoy your own Self, embrace that love you feel, glory in your blossoming and realise it is all in you, he was the wall you hung your picture on, that picture is as fresh as ever, go hang it somewhere else, in better light and enjoy it.
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bigsss, I am so sorry!!!! I am praying for you!
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Prayers will help i need all i can get to rise back up.
ss and thanks my dear friend.
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'once again controlled
by mans will
she remains in her own
sympathy's tears'
I can sympathise with your experience but I feel tears are to be expected when we continue to bow to mans will which he often has little control of himself.
a very honest and open hearted piece, I feel for you and hope that you will heal soon, don't waste gorgeous smiles in sadness.
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frownsfreckles
Thank you for seeing through my word to my heart.
It means alot your words at the end touched my heart.
I will try to smile again someday.
Hugs
~Lisa~
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