In the eye of the hurricane
In the lightning trail
In the monsoon's fullest strength
In the tsunami's overwhelming power
In the earthquake's greatest shock
In the tornado's ravaging wind
is the center of disaster
reaching
stretching
extending
out
to embrace
another victim
A contest entry
- Take Some Points From Me by iamlost.
1070 points, ended May 1, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Criticize freely, I need input to improve
Comments
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Wow, this is very powerful! I love how you build up to the end, and I love this ideas in this. The description of each natural disaster is very good, I love how this turned out. Wonderful, thanks for the entry.
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lol
i like this write, u make it sound so... humourus (if that the right word)
yes storms are dnagourus, but u make it sound like they want to just run up to you and give you a big hug, lol
i know what u mean by "to embrace, another victim" as its like they are waiting to take lives, sorry i just made your poem sound realy weird and ironic...
lol goes to show i still have the mind of a child
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