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Longing

Longing

i close my eyes,
i see You.
i touch my lips,
i taste You.
i inhale,
i smell You.

my mouth longs
for Your kisses.
my body aches
for Your caress.
my heart yearns
for Your affection.

my skin dances
at Your touch.
my knees buckle
as You pull my hair.
Take me now,
i’m Yours to keep.

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  • Merciful-Manner
    May 6, 2008

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    wow

    This is a very good write. I like it very much, you did well with this. I to have wanted the same thing, so it's nice to find a poem I can relate to.

  • Lady Jean
    May 2, 2008

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    ever well written but i thouhgt you could have ended it better. but i loved how you wrote it and how it flows.


  • Whispered.Screams
    May 2, 2008
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    beautiful, absolutly beautiful. I feel this way about my girlfriend ^.^


    • -Ang-
      May 2, 2008
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      tee hee, its awesome to feel this way about a person, and that's what i was aiming at.

      thanks for the comment

      ang


  • fluffmarsh
    May 2, 2008
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    I love your poem, its great!


    • -Ang-
      May 2, 2008
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      thanks for your comment, its much appreciated.

      ang


    • -Ang-
      May 2, 2008
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      thank you for reading and commenting
      ang


  • elemental angel
    May 2, 2008
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    Wonderfully written
    Bravo


    • -Ang-
      May 2, 2008
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      thank you for reading and commenting
      ang


  • Dragonsong silver member
    May 1, 2008
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    mmm o wow.. you are in a nice space hun! well written.. it is good to have you back!


    • -Ang-
      May 2, 2008
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      Thanks Naids, .

      you do realize who this is written for hey

      ang

      • Dragonsong silver member
        May 2, 2008
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        swats your ass.. yes I do! see you later hun... will have to find a way to keep warm enough to play though.. I am frozen to the bone


  • infernalxfidelity
    May 1, 2008

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    wow...this was so beautiful. it seemed to flow right off the page. god, this was gorgeous. excellent poem.

    <3jules


    • -Ang-
      May 2, 2008
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      thank you so much for your comment, it is greatly appreciated.

      ang


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 1, 2008
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    Sounds like a great offer, enjoyed the poem and now you have given yourslelf to me...


  • Number 13
    May 1, 2008

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    This is beautiful!

    "my skin dances
    at your touch."

    Those are my favorite lines,
    the imagery is wonderful!

    • -Ang-
      May 1, 2008
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      thanks so much for reading and commenting. this was written with a certain special someone in mind.

      thanks again

      ang


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    May 1, 2008

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    Stunningly-written. Ang, this is wonderful writing. It is short, but the passion and feeling behind this shows a longing and a need that is so powerful. That came across so well in this.

    I love it.
    Well done Sister.
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xxx


    • -Ang-
      May 1, 2008
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      thanks my darling Brother, your comments always mean the world to me.

      hugs and kisses

      ang

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