God has laid his carpets on the hills:
primroses, peonies and daffodils.
Each slope is decked with flowers and garlands fair,
and bees are drowsy in the scented summer air.
How glorious it is to be alive--to see
nature's party clothes and vibrancy.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspirational by Kelli Marie.
2300 points, ended May 15, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hi Bill, Just browsing through your earlier stuff and came across this little gem of a poem."God has laid his carpet on the hills,primroses peonies and daffodills. A beautiful picture painted with your words...mal
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I think this piece paints an even more gorgeous picture than the one you took your inspiration from. Beautifully done!
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You paint a wonder picture. I could imagine the bees and butterflies that would hover over all those beautiful colors. Very nice write. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
Kelli -
She does indeed look dressed feistivly.Wonderful take.
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Excellent
Dear Poet, enjoyed this piece of poetry very much. Loved everything, the title, the natural lilt and rhyme so beautifully written that this is how rhyme should be, uncompromized, flowing, not written front to back to achieve end line rhyme at all costs to the rest of the piece, loved the joyfulness within and the imagery, even the bees seem to be lulled by the ambience of God's Garden, they seem euphoric within the drowsy state of the scented summer air. Well done indeed!
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Interesting to see your treatment of a more conventional poetic theme, Bill. I am of two minds whether it works for you, so I am reading and re-reading. Good luck with it.
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i love this. it's lovely.
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