A kaleidoscope of colors,
like a feast for the eyes,
carpets the ground.
From passionate purple
to lime like greens and yellows;
original oranges cover hills.
Flowers fill the senses,
sights, smells abound;
petals soft to the touch.
Breath taking beauty
reminds me of God's garden;
splendid natural nature.
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This is a beautiful poem on nature and the creation. I like the imagery and picture also. It's very pretty
Thank you for sharing and thank you for your entry.
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Can you imagine what Heaven is going to look like?
Glory!
Superb beauty Erika....God bless you!
Bear ~
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MMM, the variety, and if you think some plants are edible literally too
I like how everything is poured upon a page in stable alliteration and happiness. "like a feast for the eyes, carpets the ground" is interesting, so it isn't for the mouth only because you don't eat directly like an animal lol, I know I'm silly but it does point out land beauty. Showing me the menu of brightness in the next stanza is sweet, and yes it's on it's own nurturing flavor so to speak when combined and not removed, but looked at for possibly a long time. I also enjoy your use of citrus comparison for emphasis. Ooh, I was speculating line six of this write, oh my that's poetically picturing the richness never seen before even in that range... ha, that's unique.
Also am taken by each perspective you give me in the basics, like instead of just throwing it out that blossoms are in the air or fields, but each specific sense. There has already been more than the typical fragrance, though what's new and true for me from this poem is the awareness, always lovely.
The ending sums it up for how everything could come about, who gave the ability to not suffocate. A nice translation more than just 'wow' back to beginning times. "natural nature" also made me giggle because of your indicating language.
Not complex but not blandly simple!
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A lovely write. Good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Best wishes in the contest.
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The opening line catches our attention with the lovely consonnance. You have used alliteration to wonderful effect in this short and affirming verse. Well done. Peace, Liz
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It was pretty solid, a short piece with some vivid imagery.
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A kaleidoscope of colors,
like a feast for the eyes,
carpets the ground.
Breath taking beauty
reminds me of God's garden;
splendid natural nature.
beautiful poem thank you for sharing your poem with the group.
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Absolutely gorgeous!
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I like the alliteration you used. Very colorful and filled with imagery. Good job. Glad you want to put it in the poll
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As beautiful picture you have painted here, nature in all its glory.
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Beautiful
Amazing take on this prompt. you captured it so well. Best of luck in the contest.
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Anything this beautiful would quailify as God's garden. Very well written. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
Kelli -
it is Gods Garden...expressed with the tender thoughts of your heart's spill...
Mal
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That is gorgeous. Those hills look steep and big. It does look like a kaleidoscope of colors. Good luck to you in the contest.
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I must say.
Now you have come in here and perfectly described the scene in a powerful poetic way. I truly enjoyed reading this piece. Another reason why you are a favorite. -
I received this photo in an email over a year ago and saved it always. It is just a beautiful photo that takes my breath away. I bet the smell would be fabulous.
Cheryl
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