hills of color
far as eyes can see
spilt paint
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In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Inspirational by Kelli Marie.
2300 points, ended May 15, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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It does seem effortless, doesn't it? so gorgeous your haiku. thank you for sharing with all of us here.
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Fabulous viewpoint
HEHE, your font's shade really strikes part of the point in this haiku because the orange right above in the picture sticks out now. The setup is very describing for a welcome into the poem, almost like 'rows,' tiny ones of patches of plants across the dale... so much is captured tightly, for truth too especially when you read it with the next verse. I also think that L2 can be taken two ways haha, in length visibility and discovering what little natural things are packed in growth depths in-between.
Explicit aha, and in some cases out of this poem, "spilt paint" or anything would be a true throw-off for literal reasons. But, here, it adds another thought to the same land we already knew about. Those are nice ~ this one fully emboldens the flow of things. Because when it is splotched in a mix of hues, nothing is align neatly, and that is how this is wildly, yet wonderfully. Gives a resonance of not being a headache lol, with the same looks.
I found three splendid courtesies, yours included for Kelli Marie's contest!
PIA-K -
Excellent
Excellent take on this prompt. I have never mastered the art of Haiku but hope to someday be able to write them as well as this. Best of luck
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this is pretty
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A very well written haiku. It does look as though paint has been spilled all over the hills. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
Kelli -
Multi hued inspired verse Haiku. Nicely done!
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this is wondeful sam...I love the image presented...
awesome~
mal
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Yep I would say so.
Beautiful graphic and beautiful haiku as only you can do. This is a truly lovely piece to read and I agree with the sentiment of the haiku. -
What a wonderful haiku for a great photo. I was just telling someoneery how I got this photo about a year ago in an email...it is so very beautiful.
Well done.
Cheryl
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