I slip in and out of shadows of doubt
This I leech, delve with in your already existing dread
Your head, ah, isn’t that what they talk about now?
Silly little cunt! High school prophecies came.....True.
Isn’t it better for your heart to succeed,
That is be better left alone instead of
becoming another’s dumpster of seed?
Waiting patiently, potently exceeding
I’m the darkness within, the light glamor’s ray
Disillusioned and fey, your dreams are my to seethe
Only 16, and already you’re my disciple of whoredom
No longer bound by freedom, hearing whispers
Little far flung giggles, high illustrious bitch
The perfect one, already has her mothers tits!
Your home and I, as you already know
Have beaten you to this place.
Your nowhere safe, I’m here to bombard
Pounding with the devil’s hammer
That guilt, that shame of one nights desire.
Can’t you feel it now?
Shifty erratic glares, from all sides
Not a place is safe from my tentacles
You’ve been myspaced...
The nights blanket of pinpoint light
Has came and gone, leaving bags of dread under thy eyes
Another eight-hour shift of horror
Of the pressure, the thought of giving in to carnal passion
Of coarse your still pure, from what they know
But what if,
That bitch that holds the truth
Will tell,
What hell, will I then go through.
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Comments
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Ohhh! Dark and dripping with contempt. The second stanza is my favorite, it feels real and so true. I like the feel of this one, a high stepping bitch!
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Errie and fertile creation of atmosphere. Great dark imagery and use of word-dancing mechanics. Thanks for the great read
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First and foremost I would label this adult for the shear fact of the language you used and secondly for topic matter you reference. Overall this was very discriptive in a dark and almost sneering fashion practically ozzing with animosity and disdain, i like that feel that you created in this piece. There are a couple of minor errors in here; line 28: 'you're' instead of 'your' and line 23; maybe its because I'm not privy to what this phrase actually means but this felt awkward and out of place almost like a punchline or catchphrase that doesn't quite make sense. Sorry I didn't get to comment on this earlier so that you could correct your mistakes, you won't be penalized for my oversight there. Thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest!
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