Slurp, shhh, hic, don't you see
the irony of White Zinfandel,
it's an infidel, standing straight
dressed prettily in pink,
and am I colour blind, no,
no I find its f f facets fascinating,
warming thoughts ruby red
like little pear drop bells
ringing tastebuds on the tongue,
shhh, listen to its lullaby
mulled, mellow, throated sigh
to what's the word, tamerial,
oops, material for the tapas,
hic, meant, hic, the tapestry
of la la la life,
let's dance to the rosey glow of prose,
p p pick up a penquin, partner,
I've got more than a yen
for happy, snappy, sweet feet.
A contest entry
- How drunk are you? by Ace13.
550 points, ended May 8, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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L L L Lovey
You do have a way with words don't you sweetie.
Be you Cockney...no
an Eastender...I don't think so
from Manchester...couldn't cut through that...what was that?
no bio
no pic
no Picadilly Circus
TTFN
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nice one mrs.
ive seen that wine
white...pink
its nivver reight.
if that's white i'm an irishman.
bejesus.
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Sooo good. I can see the whisky takng effect. The narrative is excellennt and the stammering here adds realsim to the whole piece. Thank you for a quiet chuckle.
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Wow!!! So cool...
Love this...
Its fun, funny & playful...
Great narrative that captures the mood, feeling & giggles of a fine wine mind state, both eliquently & surprisingly concisely... lol! Try saying that after a few. lol!
Thought I'd swing by cause I haven't chatted with you in a while & check out you're latest & I wasn't disappointed...
Another fantastic write that made me smile & didn't fail to enthrall...
Well done!!!
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Thankyou Fritz my friend, lol yes try saying that after a few! Thanks for swinging by and am delighted this made you smile!
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No probs, it was my pleasure...
Have a great weekend...
Take care,
Fritz..........
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You have painted your picture very well. It is p p perfect, pal.
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Thankyou very much indeed and especially for joining in the l l l lunacy of tongue tripping after too much sipping
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quite a nice read...at the very least, original
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i'll have a pint or two with you yvette..cheers pal..great write..xxx
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How cheery and silly and so so good. Your ability to pull off any kind of write amazes me. You are the bomb dear woman, simply the bomb...even with wine in you...lol.
Becky
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Sorry I clicked on to read again...now you have it on Rewards I have wasted your points
My apologies for wanting another round with you hon
HIC....Linda
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It is my shout for this round
A girl's night in where safe and sound
Here's to you my shlurrrrrpy friend...
A rosy glow with words well penned
Good luck hon
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Yvette, you're as ever so eloquent, your writing so elegant even when you're s s shmashed. Good luck Sister Poetess.
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Clever, amusing and very likeable poem.
Bill
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boy you are hammered arnt you. Again just another way of showing how multi-faceted you are. Memories, or blank spots? either way brings me back to the hey days of high school, only high school wasnt that charming
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OH! I love white zin, and blush chablis...actually there is no bad wine...This is very creative and sounds like a good time and a happy drunk person. Bottoms up
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this has beautiful colors & it warms the face down to the feet
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a gud peace of popetry oll wears the abr gun, i s dat teh sealin ro teh flour? i kneed anover dwink i fink
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one more drop...
nothing a cameroon won't soothe, or a starlight merry-whistle tuned to the stereophonic solidness of sound. and is that a lampshade you're sporting, or does it just seem that dark in here? down to the sweet, snappy, happy feet... - watch 'em shuffle around...
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Nice. I like the whole stutter effect....very....effective. Hahaha, i used a pun. Anyways very creative perspective and good luck
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