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what if

i just can't shake this feeling
what if she makes it her's
it's mine!!!
what if this is the worst day of my life?

feelings of depression
crawling over me
shaddowing me with anger
for things that did not happen

i see blood flowing
and it comforts me

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  • Kari gold member
    May 5, 2008

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    Welcome To AP

    hello hardwire,

    That is sad about you seeing blood and it being the only thing that comforts you.

    Shaddowing should possibly be corrected to :
    Shadowing

    I hope that soon things get better for you!


    Kari,
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  • quimby
    May 1, 2008

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    great!

    I liked this poem, It shows how you felt, and feel, it kind of reminds me of me sometimes, feeling locked up inside, You know to to write poems.