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His Grace (Hutain)

For I have sinned and fallen short

yet my Lord has given me grace,

His loving arms give me support

I continue to seek his face.

He brings me to a better place

opened my hearts door- He walked in,

arrogant ways He then replaced

when He forgave me for my sin.

Author notes

Hutain is 8 lines, 8 syllables, ababbcbc

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  • carole21
    September 24, 2008

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    nicely done .. liked "yet my Lord has given me grace" and "arrogant ways He then replaced" . . congrats on the trophy . . like the Hutain format also


  • just mercedes gold member
    July 30, 2008

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    This is lovely - a new form for me, and simple and elegant. I like the depth you achieved in such a short piece.


  • quack silver member
    May 14, 2008
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    this is really nice mom i love it
    and i love you so much


  • Samplette gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    A very beautiful write. The hutain form is simple, but has an elegant read to it. Thank you for entering.
    Sam


  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    A lovely, heartfelt write. You kept to the form perfectly. Very good flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Nice rhythm. Good word choice, assonance and nice alliteration. Well done and a much enjoyed read.


  • M0ofi3
    May 1, 2008

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    Another good work here, sis. The only thing I would do would remove "did" (seems unnecessary) and change "replace" for "replaced.

    But that's just me.

    We must remember that grace is a gift. Like all gifts it must be used to the benefit of the gifted one as well as the glory of the Giver. Jesus said, "To whom much is given, much is required." Grace to save is grace to change. That's our hope and His glory.

    God bless, girl!

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