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quintessence

essence of gesture
             inhaled as incense
                      scented of capture

           slows down pulse
                     yet quickens heart

                           towards surrender

 

[spirit soars at thoughts of meadow]

 

                           these verses carry

                   not nearly enough               

luminescence to express

 

                           comely caresses

           imagination skims

as purest perfection 

 

[soul seeks moon above all endeavors]       
 

 

                           
 

 

 

 

                          

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  • nansie
    May 17, 2008
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    Brilliant

    What more can I say?
    Love light and Peace

  • mindpoet
    May 17, 2008

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    The rhythm and structure of this piece...wonderful! I'm sure this will be a contest winner and favorite of all!
    Thanks for sharing.
    Erik


  • Nocturne
    May 17, 2008

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    I'm never a fan of formatting tricks and visual structuring of poetry, but the diction was strong in this piece, some nice turns of phrase as well. I'm glad I had a chance to read this piece,

    Cheers for the read!
    Nocturne


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      May 17, 2008
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      Thank you. I tried something different with this one. I wrote it out and then starred at it until I knew what form It it should take... and did not change one word to put it in into that shape.
      I wonder if I could do it again? lol

  • Page Deleted.
    May 17, 2008

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    This piece is amazingly breathtaking. Your words and the way you have set them out is simply beautiful. Thankyou for sharing.





    Keira
    --- pink.glitter.hearts


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    May 17, 2008

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    Wow...Love sure looks good on you two.. This was so creative in its form and delivery. Just loved it.
    Gonna go read Ash's now..
    Great job
    Nor


  • olivesinajar
    May 17, 2008

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    I love the ending and the way in which you constructed the poem. The middle line in brackets though is less powerful then the last and I also don't know where it fits in your poem as a whole.

    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      May 17, 2008
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      Well... that middle line in brackets is something the intended will well understand. Others may gain from it as they may.

      Thank you for reading.


  • LollipopofCorruption
    May 17, 2008

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    wow. the form of this poem is amazing and your word choice is fantastic


  • chroNIK.
    May 17, 2008

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    This is a well constructed and beautiful poem. You are a very talented writer! Short but far from simple. I enjoyed the read.


  • vampirebloodlust
    May 17, 2008
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    Amazing! And yet no surprsize coming from you. wonderful job. Keep it up. mwa

  • Sunshine Princess
    May 12, 2008

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    I like your poem for my Auntie Ashley this is nice I glad you write nice poem for her she deserve lots of nice poems Write more please


  • Tattboyspet
    May 5, 2008

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    ~shaking head~
    soppy and romantic ...
    ~sigh~
    with a bit of sensuality in there (of course!)

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    Oh Mark this is beautiful and yes it is good I love it very nice indeed.Goodluck in the contest much love
    always

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