Moments passed away
Lost time wanders black hole
Gramophone once played
Music of yesterdays
Is now stuck in the zone
Ears are deafened
Eyes blinded with fear
Soul lives broken melodies
But hope lingers on
For one more play back session
Of the times when I was with my dad
Author notes
Just waiting to be with my dad, sooner the better
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie--Word prompt by Purush.
450 points, ended May 5, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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It sounds like you and your dad were close I hope you get to see him again but in the meantime, stay here with the ones who love you.
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All the best in my contest
very well tuned to the context of the contest.
choice of words played a notable part in turning the verse to sweetness and softness.
"Soul lives broken melodies
But hope lingers on
For one more play back session
Of the times when I was with my dad"
All the best in my contest -
This was a truly touching write.. You can really feel the longing here.. Great write!! best of luck! and beautifully done!..
Angel
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