In a land, far away from here
Lives a Queen, that many fear
The tragic story of how she came
To be this witch, who has no name
Is far too dangerous for me to tell
For she may put me under a spell
And that would not be very good
As i've seen what happpened to Robin Hood
He tried to help the poor get rich
Then all of a sudden he started to itch
Removing his coat he came to find
Little bugs on his behind
He wriggled around to get them away
Poor Robin, he's still trying today
And if that doesn't scare you, maybe this will
The Queen has teamed up with Cruella De Vil
They turned Perdita and Pongo, and all of their pups
Into furniture and clothes, and little teacups
Not to mention poor Cinderella
Who is now being used as the witches' umbrella
For the cat made a mess whilst chasing a mouse
Because Cinders forgot to take him out of the house
But the Queen left the cat, as she heard a beautiful song
And realised that she hadn't sang in so long
So she broke out a tune in the palace garden
When a man came along and said "Your majesty, I beg your pardon"
"But the song you are singing you've got it all wrong..."
And before he could finish, there was a thud so strong
And to the ground the charming man fell
But not before hearing the wicked Queen yell
"I must find that maiden with the beatuiful voice!"
"And stop her from singing songs of rejoice!"
But as the Queen left the palace walls
She heard a distressful sound from the waterfalls
So she went over to see what was going on
And found that all the water was gone
Confused and puzzled the wicked Queen thought
Then again came the scream that sounded distraught
The Queen quickly ran to the big oak tree
And was shocked and amazed at what she did see
A beautiful maiden with skin so white
And the wicked Queen rubbed her hands in delight
The maiden had with her the Queens missing water
The maiden got scared and said "Please, i'm your daughter!"
The Queen was furious the maiden had made such a statement
That she locked her away in the palace basement
To be sure that no Prince would rescue the girl
The Queen thought best that the key must be hurled
So the key dissapeared and the maiden was no more
Until the queen heard her singing from under the floor
The Queen was angry,but indeed had no choice
To spend the rest of her life, hearing that beautiful voice
A contest entry
- Lift my Spirits by aboomer.
525 points, ended May 6, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Twisted Fairy Tales by Hope Angel.
450 points, ended June 7, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I've never written a poem like this before, I had fun doing it and hope you have fun reading it, either way, let me know what you think!
Comments
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kids are going to love your work, you have a gift to entertain and mystify their minds. lovely work.
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Wow! That was an awesome poem! The rhyme flowed very well and you didn't break away from the story for the sake of rhyme!!! I can really appreciate quality poetry like that!!! Great, great write!!!!
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This was a very good poem. Cute, funny, all of the above! There was some spots in the poem where I thought maybe some word changing would help but maybe that is just me. Other than that I thought that it was great. keep writing
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Not at all what I expected, but a nice change form the normal. I loved the way you pulled in so many characters and seemed to make the witch have the charactrisitic of witch in every fairy tale. The length didn't bother me like I thought it would as the story kept me guessing. Nice Job!!!
Hugs!
Cayla
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Long but simple. It was a very cute poem. I really liked it. The flow seemed to staunch in a few spots, but it did pick up after that. Punctuation could have been used, but I'm really not that picky because the poem is wonderful just as it is. Thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed reading. [=
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Congrats on the Gold!
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I really liked this. It's so funny and clever. Thanks for entering
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Maybe the Queen will go mad until she lets her outta the basement eh? What do ya think? This was very creative, it was cool how you wove different stories together and i thought the part about Cinderella being the Queens umbrella was darkly hilarious!
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Wow, what an interesting tale you have woven! A lot of thought you have put into this I think - it's very well done, lovely rhyme with a decent flow. And great images - and you even tossed in some humor!
thank you for such an enjoyable entry
best wishes
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it was awesome and funny and it was really good making it rhyme and keeping the story flowing XD.
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