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dear, daughter and my needs

I feel
my hair leave
the cheek that's across from
my husband's shop when I walk by,
kiss thought

I will relax now
but have more to relinquish
so much and cull,,, like
can't believe that big flower
is for mouth and nose

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not emoticons other than plant/animal sweetness of expression staying on course lol, please

a spring in step poem work hour

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  • raggyann
    May 17, 2008
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    THIS POEM HAD ME FEELING ALOT OF DIFFERENT THINGS AND IT WAS VERY UP AND LIGHT
    BEAUTIFULY DONE


    • Bams
      May 17, 2008
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      straight cheerfulness felt also

      raggyann one's own meadow meeting welcome

      I suppose this did have the energy for all caps, I did get goose bumps raised on my skin to write first stanza ha-ha and calmed to type balance ~

      I thank you for the positive note on my personal poem, but I'm not into the emoticon symbol for our applause as it leaves me with other connotations lol...
      babies are my subject