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Hour Glass





Her hips draw my fingertips

along curves which fit and filter

moments somewhat slower

than a many of a kind;





then our grip soon slides and slips

those sands across my mind.








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  • Malabu
    May 21, 2008
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    I like the poem...sensual and delightful...on the critique side...less is more in this case....
    I like sensual poems and you seemed to have delved into it...I had trouble with (as many of a kind) might want to edit the last lines with a new thought..thanks for entering my contest...
    Mal