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Blanketed In Bruises and Insanity

taunt me with cool, crisp fruity wine
and bloody mary shooters

filled with plump juicy oysters
that slide sensuously down my throat

make me crazy wild with desire


grip me tightly, cover me with kisses,
enter me from every door,
licking and suckimg the hot sweet sap

that drips from me

until greed gives way to exhaustion


delicious purple bruises,
and scarlet blood droplets
ooze from me - still raw
because we’ve done unspeakable things


sweet souvenirs of bruises and insanity


Author notes

Written by: Touchof1der
Option 2:
"Your love left me blanketed in bruises and insanity"

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  • faderman1959
    May 10, 2008
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    Uncontrolable lust strikes again! Amazing imagery and passion here!


  • Sprite silver member
    May 5, 2008

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    Wow. I love this poem. It delivers the sensuality of which it speaks. "Licking and sucking the hot sweet sap..." whew. Of course I wonder what caused the bruises (submissive?) and love is definitely well described as a form of insanity.

    That exhaustion at the end says everything about how passionate the encounter had been. Unspeakable? Whew, again.

    Yum. ~ Joyce


  • Wandika gold member
    May 3, 2008
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    passion

    can be overdone
    and the bruises just painful in the morning.

    The poem was well written.

  • Rowan gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    Carried away in a sea of passion~ the only way to go, me thinks.
    Excellently sensual.


  • MagicLady silver member
    May 1, 2008

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    You did a very good job with this prompt. Nice background and use of color to enhance your poem. Hard for me to understand "delicious purple bruises" but you did a great job with your descriptions. Made me feel uncomfortable, and that is what writing is all about....to make people "feel"

    Cheryl


  • Midnight Lace
    May 1, 2008

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    I am really at a loss as to how to put my thoughts into words here. I find this to be quite an amazing poem. You have really outdone yourself here. It seems like every time you have to leave for a while, you just come back full of gusto. The imagery in this is simply divine and second to none. There is so much for one to wrap their mind and thoughts aeound. Good luck in the contest!
    ~Midnight Lace


  • TheRealDeal
    May 1, 2008

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    I had to really give this one a little time to just sink and flow. There is so much here to imagine and yet you have left spaces for us to fill in as well which I actually found quite pleasing and appealing. This really hits the nerve endings. Go for the gold here!
    JLG


  • TXCowgirl
    May 1, 2008

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    You have all the right elements included within the lines here. You have sight, sound, taste and even smell. This is fantastic entry and the title fits the poem perfectly. Good luck in the contest. I can really feel this one deep.
    TXCowgirl


  • iamlost gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    This is an amazing write, I found quite a lot of depth in this poem. The imagery and wording is wonderful. I like your background as well. Beautifully done.

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