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Created By Grains



Each grain wields
together to create
beauty in swirled colors

of glass.

Seeping through
pen hole each on
it's own,
is a memory
to be inhaled
and exhaled;

never to be forgotten.

 

 

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A metaphor
Hour glass

A contest entry

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  • Malabu
    May 23, 2008

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    sort of breathing time and poetry...swirls in colors of mind contained in glass we can read hearts and minds...dont know why I thought this...guess its the words to your poem...I like this too...
    Mal

  • carole21
    May 1, 2008

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    nice

    a nice descriptive take on the prompt . . liked "Each grain wields together" and "is a memory to be inhaled" . . good luck in the contest


  • buffsab99
    May 1, 2008
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    Excellent

    What a beautiful description of time passing through an hour glass. Best of luck in this contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    And beautiful metaphor it is! Such depth... that is how memories are...