Seeing those tears fall from your eyes,
knowing your heart is broken,
realizing you have fears beyond belief,
as you spill out words that for years were left unspoken.
What I want the most,
is a world without pain.
I want to be able to look into someones eyes,
and not see a lost person crushed in a chain.
If I know how it all feels,
living your life in desperation,
why would I want it upon someone else?
I'd take it away without hesitation.
I hate to see others down,
hate to see anyone anything but happy.
It doesnt feel good when im bad,
so nobody else should ever be crappy
If I could I'd take away all the sadness,
everyone would have no choice but to smile.
Frowns wouldn't exist,
and life would be totally worthwhile.
Broken hearts wouldn't ever happen,
because love would fall like rain.
What I want the most,
is a world without pain.
Author notes
I guess there a lot of things I want in life but after a lot of thinking, this is the thing I want the most.. Or atleast pretty close.
A contest entry
- What Do You Want? by violetrose.
630 points, ended May 15, 2008, 37 entries
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This was a really surprising piece. I started to read the first line and thought I'd be getting another of those "I hate my life" type poems, but it turned out to be completely different. Bravo! I really like this one. The idea is beautiful, and you present it in a refreshing way with a light-hearted undertone. The rhymes are really great, too, and hardly ever feel awkward or forced (although I think the word you wanted was "crappy"..."crappie" is a type of fish). Overall, it's a really great piece that makes me happy to read. Wonderful job!
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Yeah, I don't really know where the beginning came from but hey, oh well! =] Thanks! Haha, thanks for informing me! I changed it. I found it funny though. =] Thanks again.
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Sigh... wouldn't that be wonderful!!! A life without pain... I have a pain disorder from physical injuries so that would be nice in that regard, but the emotional pain of depression or past hurts is indeed the hardest to carry... so for that to be gone would be wonderful!
I think what you've said you "want the most", is a compassionate and beautiful thing! Well done!
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It is, I rather be physically stabbed then hurt emotionally or depressed. But maybe thats just because I've never been stabbed. =] Nah, probbaly not! But without all pain would be great! && Im sory to hear about your pain disorder. That would be hard. =/
Thanks!
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