She made a mistake and now must suffer
She fell in love with a human
He showed her love and compassion
Saying that she would be much happier with him
She knew this wasn't possible and told him so
Disappointed he says "If you truly love me, then kill me"
She sits and wonders why she would do this to the one she loves
Next he tells her "If you really love me you will do this for me"
So she does and right after, she is banned from heaven forever
Forced to live an eternity on earth, to suffer for what she has done
Now her lover up in heaven says to her "You're very foolish"
"Thank you for saving me from my hell, which they call earth"
She screams causing waves to crash, finally realizing her mistake
Trusting in someone who was so tricking, false and selfish
She is now consumed with hatred and sadness
Darkness starts to take over her heart and body
Once white wings turning black from despair
Her world of light and happiness, slowly darkening
Wishing she never made this mistake, for it cost her everything
She is stuck in a world, which we humans created
A contest entry
- Ocean's Scream - PIF - Quickie by background music.
725 points, ended May 2, 2008, 7 entries
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This is incredibly picturesque. I loved reading it. Such a tragic story, so beautifully written.
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hell
That comes close to me. Very good i loved it. Its amazing.
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This is beautiful! I love it!
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whoaness
i luv it!
all dark and supernatural
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great poem, very sad
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AWWW what a sad story! I'd be screaming to if this happened to me... Good take on the prompt.
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great! absolutely beautiful, you did a great job with the prompt. good luck, this deserves to win
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I dont have words to explain but its touch my heart feeling... and how the story is neatly brought to a close.
Good job!
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wow intersting poem and nice background
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The chick in the pic kinda looks like meh.. I love this piece.. I've never heard anything like it. I hope u don't mind if I bookmark it? It was absolutely f*cking awesome! Rock on dude xx -
Wow, you'll definitely win this one! And the background is beautiful. ^^
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This was really great!! I loved this! you did such a wonderful job with the prompt! beautifully done! Best of luck to you..
Jetleena
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