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rusted railing

Squinting eyes remind me
of AmberVision infomercials.

Forcing two quarters into salted slots,

I press my eye-bones

into over-sized binocular mask.

 

With the spit-shined view of sky-line

dropping calligraphy against azure,

a reflective moment finds me

imagining Polaroid flashes

lighting up our hotel corners.

 

As the timer clacks the last rites,

the scope closes her eyes.

Drawing back from concrete lodging,

those bars that imprison small children

call out my attention span.

 

Leaning over orange-chipped rods,

I make saliva walk the plank.

You always seemed to despise

my habit of spitting over railings.

And some just toss salt for good luck.

 

 

 

 

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RyanosaurusWrecks

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  • LaPoetaSinLimites
    May 18, 2008
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    "those bars that imprison small children"...love it!


  • righteousme
    May 1, 2008

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    descriptive scrumptiousness... mmm mmm good... yr writing always takes me to another place... i enjoy your pieces very much... i love them little binocular machine thingys too... oh and i love to spit too... but i am afraid of heights...


  • NeonRose
    May 1, 2008

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    I'm going to toss salt and hope I'm not walking past at an inconvenient moment..**..excellent write, even including the rather messy habit! Good luck in this contest.


  • Flight of Dragons
    May 1, 2008

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    Cool! One of your best. Liked it and the image was a nice touch


  • aboomer silver member
    May 1, 2008

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    WOW! Now this would have been a perfect PO!...lol
    Great wording and images - another one of your stellar writes!!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • iamlost gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    This is very interesting, I love what you've done. The picture can be seen to fit with the poem, but you've taken it and created something more. Definitely unique, thank you for this entry!


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    May 1, 2008
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    thank you for the kind words...

  • ecrivain01
    May 1, 2008
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    Not bad, bud ...

    not bad. You've got my vote for the Gold.


  • Quill Bill
    May 1, 2008
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    few words in this i'v never herd of, guess i'll have to look them up,

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