Can't you see you're what I despise,
You and all your worthless lies.
Not knowing how much it hurts,
the words are like on going alerts.
Worthless words
You've betrayed me for the last time,
yet hating you would be a crime.
Why can't I just say how I feel,
shut you up and make you kneel.
Worthless words
I'm tired of being last in line,
with you breaking my spine.
That's it I won't let you win,
My revenge will soon begin.
Worthless words
Author notes
We've all been betrayed and lied to in one form or another, and this is just a quick way of me letting it out.
A contest entry
- Tell Me of Your Misery by thedarkestjolly.
315 points, ended May 6, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Those people who break you & don't seem to give a damn. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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Comments
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Love and hate aren't far apart, but the person who hurts us will pay for it one day... I'm such a lover though, I don't want them to in a way. Well put though.
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God help us that I always feel so deeply saddened when someone so young can write about such deep betrayal and hurt...for life should still be fresh and safe...too many years still lie ahead to be hurt...and sadly you shall be many times more before life is over...just hold on to you and try not to grow too tainted...(beautiful soul)...great write in meter and flow, depth and sorrow...love the repeat line between stanzas...very effective...
Best,
mystic
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aye there will always be those that betray us, and at times we betray others, such is the madness of the life we lead, a good poem .
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Short to the point I like it good luck! -
Very powerful. So much hate but I can see the love behind it.
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A very good venting piece. I like it. It wasn't scary or dark or morbid, but you were able to do it in a poem I enjoyed to read!
superb write
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Good
A very emotional piece, I love the feeling surrounding this piece and I think thats what poetry is all about touching emotions.
At first you think this is just an agery person, hating this other person, so you start reading between the lines and start getting confortable with that idea, then you totally turn the piece on its head with the line
'yet hating you would be a crime.'
It seems you desperatly want to hate this person but there still that thing, that connection inside of you that cant quite get there
Brilliant!
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Thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate it.
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Good write here
Yes its sad but true and its good to release the frustration I do that a lot through my work and it does help .Kepp up the good work
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i like it and i see ur meaning good job.
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Simple and sweet...I like this. Honesty is priceless.
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The voice of the Poet is heard with clarity, the title works as an apt intro and as part and parcel of the poem. Indeed the ache and weight of worthless words weighs us down, it's not until they are exorcised that we may feel lighter.
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"Can't you see you're what I despise,
You and all your worthless lies..."
Well done indeed! You have expressed your hurt and your humiliation very well. There is a strength and an honesty about this poem that is quite compelling. Keep on penning my friend!
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