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I'm Coming Out

Been in the tunnel awfully long.
Buried my joy and my merry song.
It's time to unwind and recline,
coming out is the thing; so fine.

Categorically, I will add to
the response of this new view.
And, the lingering will cease,
as my everything, I do increase.

Captured victory is springing,
laughter's songs I'll be singing.
Refrains of perfect melody I seek
from the restored lips of the meek.

Valiant duty saw the pain's tide,
as the loneliness of the soul's ride,
turn the flow; switch-a-roo, now.
Doesn't matter if I don't know how.

I see the handwriting on the wall,
the sad tears have been now recalled.
Tender is the rush of the royal flush
enough so to make a black girl blush.

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  • smonte19124
    May 28

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    Beautiful

    These are wonderfully expressive words that share a part of you with the reader. I very much enjoyed reading this poem and can relate wholeheartedly. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. God Bless


  • toomysterious
    May 27
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    Oh, what a joyous and hopeful poem this is . Thoroughly enjoyed the read.


  • liaanne
    May 25
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    Every line is beautiful.
    Keep up the great work(y)

  • BigSpiral
    May 25
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    Beautiful

    I like this poem. It paints a nice picture for me. Thanks for the prize in your contest.


  • Swan song gold member
    May 18
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    This is cute and strongly rhythmical A beautiful poem indeed!!!!


  • Brooklynz Own
    May 14

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    This writing is spectacular. The work you've put into this poem shows brilliantly. Thank you for sharing and keep writing.

  • Musimwa
    May 13

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    Very good

    I see the handwriting on the wall,
    U took me to Daniel's days. Gosh, u have played well with words dear poet. I love this piece. It also speaks to my poor soul. Keep this up.

  • celadia gold member
    May 9

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    The first stanza is superb. I love the image of the tunnel and the buried joy etc. I'm glad you're getting through this hard time. Lots of love.


  • a dozenglassroses
    May 8
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    this was amazing I love your style. I really enjoyed this piece.

  • funpum silver member
    May 6
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    this sounds like a song to me -I could hear you singing it.


  • whits end silver member
    May 3

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    I love made up words, are you kidding? LOL! As I read this I felt how personal it was and I thank you for sharing. The rhyme was great as well!

  • BadGothBoy
    May 1

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    this looks like something you really enjoyed writing, and was away to motivate yourself. Koodus! It was a fun read!

  • Yemassee silver member
    May 1

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    Hit the ground running, sometimes that is what new beginnings feel like, always a relief after a long time in prison, so to speak. If based on fact, I'm glad the sad tears have been recalled.


    • 2lullabyhaven
      May 1
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      There are all kinds of prisons you know, the prison of the 'soul' is the worst kind..
  • individuality gold member
    May 1
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