See the boy?
See this child?
He screams in terror.
Wanting only for someone to come,
somebody to come to cuddle him,
and to love him.
Nobody comes to his aid
especially when he needs them most.
When his nightmares start to control
his small and fragile mind.
When the dreams start to live in reality.
And they begin to live his life.
He screams and yells
until his throat turns bright red and raw.
And then he sees why
his life is ever so.
And from there on
he finally sees the truth,
That his mother is to blame
for all of his pain.
She did drugs when he was just a babe.
And she reasoned
that she only did them
to help her though all of her problems.
And with the burning pain,deep within
her blackend and dark chest.
She did not know though,
through her fogged
and blind mind,
that she was ruining
her son's only life.
So he grows up,
Going down the path chosen for him.
And he forever lives
his cursed life.
In which many times
he wished to end..
A contest entry
- A Poem About Something Small by Atrus.
600 points, ended May 27, 2008, 10 entries
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i really loved this one!!!! for a reason that is quite dark and it hits close to home for me... my mother was addicted to drugs... things got very out of hand... i hated her and still do for everything she put my sis and i through... i think about her all the time ... many times ive wanted to end my life because of her my mind is scared....
this was a very good and dramatic writting !!!!!!
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Wow, this is extremely deep and meaningful. Your starting and ending stanzas really stand out to me. Thank you for sharing this poem.
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Thank you for entering my contest. I really enjoyed this poem. It is so easy when things are so bad in ones life to think that it is not in the cards to be happy. To blame someone for a day of unhappiness or a moment of grieve is acceptable, but to blame someone for the doomdnesss of ones life seems almost pathetic. I believe that fate is determined by that person, not by what has happened to them or who they are surrounded by. Good Write and good luck
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I really love this. Sometimes, this is how I feel. Yeah, this is deep...in a way. But this is truly awesome. On top of it all, this was a great vent! Thanks for sharing and entering!
:She did not know though,
through her fogged
and blind mind,
that she was ruining
her son's only life.
So he grows up,
Going down the path chosen for him.
And he forever lives
his cursed life.
In which many times
he wished to end..: <-- the awesomest parts ever!!!
Good luck!
-->pia♫♪
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:-( Aw, thank you for sharing this poem-- though it was describing a really sad situation, in my opinion that's the beauty of poetry... it can take us to the extremes of human experience. And sometimes the best way to deal with emotions is to express them through a poem
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Beautiful!!!
WOW!! This was amazing and sad! I work with children, and I have a child in my room who i could swear you wrote this poem about! Very moving and touching!! Awesome!
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so deep, so poetic, I feel like that at times, thank you for sharing.
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