Formaldehyde dreams &
misunderstood intentions
keep me going
even when I think there's nothing left.
These hypothetical situations,
and the possible complications-
Electronic beasts with minds,
let's just pray the patient doesn't go flat line.
Who do I think I'm decieving?
Wasting all your time
trying to pretend what I'm saying has a meaning,
even the simple context of me, being meaningful?
That's what they call an apparition-
The medical term for a hallucination
Which basically means your simply crazy
(and yes, that music, it is all in your head.)
What's the numerical value to all your questions?
Where's the answer you've been looking for for years.
It's time to pull up my sleeves and get ready for an operation.
Cause baby, I bet you're not so pretty on the inside.
Author notes
>> The quotishness at the end, the title, and the word banks.
Wow. That's insane.
A contest entry
- Make.It.Interesting.♥ [OPTIONS] by ShotgunSherri--.
750 points, ended May 3, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Inspire Me by csflut.
850 points, ended May 31, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be harsh, be specific.
Comments
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Whoa! I loved it.
I mean... I don't know why... it just spoke volumes to me.
Last line: "your" should be you're.I love the almost-rhyme in this. It's a rather sporadic rhyme, but it works - it makes the piece feel cohesive.
Great job and good luck in the contest!!! :)
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You like the random rhyme?
It wasn't completely intentional at first, but then I just kind of went with the flow- So I'm glad to know someone likes it.
Personally, I don't even know what this poem means.. I though I had a meaning when I started...
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i sensed a bit of random rhyme in there.
but other than that a good poem.
thankyou for entering.
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