upon the crystalline wake
of a single hummingbird
The ring of fire; so latent upon
his breast --
lucid wings of ivory perfection
beating so fast; the eye cannot see
but, yet – the body remains still.
Wings. Perfectly fanning – every feather
lustrously shining out;
this hummingbirds' prized possession -
those thin fans, delicately placed
upon his frail back.
he hovers before a divine flower
the ultimate beauty of metamorphosis
petals folded outwardly so;
an open hand, offers sacred nectar
golden in the ethereal morning light
dripping like liquid gold; a drink -
a sip, sweetness of such, left for the gods
A golden drink, upon his eyes
and smelling sweetly below his nose
he hovers forward; and dips his beak
drinking deeply, for this drink; of sweetened
nectar, the sweetest, purest drink of all
he sips upon his beak.
As he lifts his young head, from the sweet
bud; golden nectar, burning in his throat
he is full, complacent... As he buzzes
away...
But, down the dusty path -
in his wake – a monotoned sky -
dripping and dying colors await
his touch, a single beat of solitary wings
He leaves the flower – which wilting
in black decay, crumbles to ash
and all color turns to brown
does he know – what he was wrought?
Clouds swarm the pristine sky,
covering it in an acid blanket
dampening the rusty sunlight
and showering the world in darkness.
A single ominous voice rings
through the death
Shall thou reconcile for thine actions?
Thou have drankith the Nectar of the Gods,
young hummingbird!
The hummingbird blind in the dark
sings out;
Oh... Divine being... hums his voice, high
and sweet through the dusty air -
I had no thought of my actions!
I shall repay you, my lord – In any way
you see fit!
The hummingbirds breast a'filled with fear
as he answered the booming voice
Anyway possible... Grumbles the Great Phantasm
in deepest thought, and decides upon this
hummingbirds' fate - and the fate of this land...
Then I shall – Take thine wings.
And all shall be returned to the land.
Author notes
This was not intended to be religious of any sort....
Picture taken from this page:
http://www.birdwatching-bliss.com/images/broad_tailed_hummingbird.jpg
No author found; wonderful page however...
I would like your opinion on it however.
Thanks
1.My Preferred is; Nature, but using it in a metaphorical sort of way.
2.I like picture prompts, because I refuse to use titles that people give me, quote just seem too cliche, and lyrical prompts aren't the type of music I like.
3. I am Perception.
4. You know, I just love writing poetry, and at any chance I do. Um. I'm just trying new things, and I haven't really won any rounds contest or really... Found any good ones - so I'm trying this one... I hope it'll be fun hehehe!
Enjoy ~!
In a list
A contest entry
- Ruby Topaz Hummingbird by Karl Weiss - Topaz.
1000 points, ended May 17, 8 entries
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Be honest here.
Comments
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... Then given the chance
through loving resolve.
to find their wings again.
I read an truly excellent and descriptive composition, of the journey and position mankind finds himself in, in this world. Very well told, well done!
Sol
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introspective
seemingly offering up the 'self to another, and unintentionaly, losing that which was hidden within.
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It's beautiful, beautiful, beautiful with thrice added beauty. Woven so well.
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Wow, you have used some stunning language and imagery in this! Well done.
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wow! that was a feast of a poem!
wow! are you the queen of prose or what!
Have you tried old english yet...you would be a natural,
and sonnets too.
wow! I am impressed with you! natural natural talent
and abilities you have here!
ears/Seattle
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awww... really enjoyed the way you kept me connected and how you ended the write.. great one!
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Very nice hun. keep up the great work.
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I wanna see what you bring to this contest!
I like your style,
Thanks for entering.
And I love how you write about nature
and twist it.
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A very well written piece with a twist from the norm. Nicely done indeed. Thank you for your fine entry in the contest.
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Great imagery and empathy
Your poem evolved from a delightful description to a fabulous fairtale. I liked "rusty sunlight -
Wow...you haven't won a trophy on this? WHY? I commented on this before ...lol. I just read it again...I STILL LOVE IT. One of the best I have read on this site! this is GOLD!
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To be honest I prefer more concise work but you have a great voice
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I'm sorry -- you didn't specify. I'll enter something shorter next time
Thanks for your time though
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its good
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This is an incredible write. It was as if nature was actually changing and growing with each line. Very vivid and strong descriptions you expressed extremely well. A very delightful read.
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WHOA!
Wooooow, I loved it!!! I love nature poems, and although it did begin like on- some other means, perhaps though some 'Divine Metamorphosis' it became so much more. I applaude you for this, lengthy but not one boring syllable!! What a great poem, keep writing!
x Malick
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WOW! When I began reading I, at first, thought this was going to be descriptive of the beauty of the humming bird. I love how it became much more. You have really great talent. Don't stop writing. It's obvious to me that you're going to mature into an amazing poet. Excellent write!
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splendid!
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ummm...so what are you still working on? This is magnificant!
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