Tell me Love, how can you see me this way
What kind of man would do this kind of thing
Are you going to doubt me yet once again
What did I do, It's driving me insane
Why can't you trust... why don't you dare
Listen Love, I wouldn't do that to you
I'm so yours and you are so everything for me
Are you going to accuse me yet once again
What did I do, to deserve to be torn up this way
Why can't you believe... why don't you risk
Tell me Love, is this some kind of disease
What is in your mind, what happened to you
Are you going to put me down yet once again
What did I do, I'm so dazed and confused
Why can't you see... why don't you try
Listen Love, one day this will have to end
The time will come that it will be too late
My weary heart can take this no more
What can I do, shall I give up on you
Why can't you stop... why don't you begin
Author notes
Trust the one you love... don't put them in a cage.
Best you risk betrayal then for you to betray your love with jealousy...
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oh but cages can be so much fun!!!!
lol
sorry i had to
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Oh yes! This is exellent! Jealousy is such a destructive emotion. Trust is imperative in a healthy relationship. ***Pam***
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i loved the repetition of listen and tell
lovely poetry indeed
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so many pearls of wisdom in this poem
why can't you stop...why don't you begin...
"the baggage that we women bury is powerful indeed."
past wounds bleed with displaced trust...
aching for constant reminders relief.
a time came when my life pack was heavy too...
had to empty it...and shocked was I to see...
how many weary souls climbed out!
almost funny actually!
ears/Seattle
beautuiful deep soul you have...will be bragging
i read you first on ap.com!
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Not only was this rich with emotion but your AN was just jaw dropping!! Your advice was just spot on! If only people could learn to trust their partner!! I know that at times I am so guilty of this!! I want to trust him and for the most part I do but there are those times in life that I just can't believe wholey that HE loves ME and that HE chose ME to spend his life with. The problem lies not with him but with my own feelings of inadequecy......I am not worthy of his love? You truly do a number on the psyche of the reader in the best of way. You really made me stop and think deeply with this one....I need to stop looking at him with jaded eyes and no longer betray our love with jealousy. Thank you.....
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I know this feeling. It's almost like a flashback to a relationship I had with a girlfriend. You brought it to life with total clarity. Amazing.
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this sounds like a very real collection of things that were said at various times and arranged into a short dialog. even though it is structured and repeats some key phrases it somehow remains informal, conversational, and natural. loved how you abandon some of the repetition and structure in the last stanza and end with "why don't you begin"
dis a gud 'un
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Very well written, heartfelt powerful piece...
And wisely said in your author notes... true, true...
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Such a powerful piece you have penned...reaches inside and breaks the heart! jealousy is a disease of the mind and destroys everyone it touches...just like being in a cage! thank you for sharing with me
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really well versed self doubt is a killer xx
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Love betrayed with jealousy. A betrayal of the mind rather than the flesh, both ravage with disease to destroy all loves beauty. It is very sad when a mind can't trust and is full of doubt and accusation.
You have written this like thoughts of a conversation, words wanting to be said. It is a poem which all can relate to, easily read and understood. The frustration and disheartened feelings shine through.
Very nice...alby
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Sentiments so well expressed in these lines - one feels the pain and anguish here, the questioning why. Liked the flow and the message you share here. One does need to trust; even when one has been hurt before, no relationship can go on without having faith and belief in the one you love. As Garth Brooks says in his song, better to have loved and lost, then not loved at all - as in the Dance.
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Beautiful yet so very sad..your heart really cries out in this write....
Many blessings to you both~
~A~
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this was just so beautifully painful.. so much emotion!! you expressed yourself and your pain so well.. you created such a sad image.. I really loved this.. well done!!
Angel
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Wow...
I'm not sure if I can place this after reading the other one before
She/he must be crazy to let go someone who writes his feelings in such beautiful words as you did in the other poem....
Don't let anyone bring you down now....
One life is all we get.....
Although this made me sad I liked it a lot....
XXJeannette
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