Caught in the whim of the forgotten,
hatred follows the coastline to her heart:
She roams endlessly
seeking- for the love that was lost at sea.
Years have weathered the rocks and sand,
yet, her passion rages in envious hues
that rumbles with her vacant stares
and casts darkness over the moon.
Though she is gone,
her footprints shall lead you to self-destruction.
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A contest entry
- Dark semi Quickie contest by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
450 points, ended May 4, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very painful and tragic, though the thought at the end is very intriguing, also adding to the piece that it can be taken different ways.
Good write.
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Thanks so much
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Wonderful dark
You have written an amazing poem, brought the scene to life along with her thoughts
Tragic
Thank you for your entry and best wishes
Julie -
This was filled with thick imagery of sorrow
and the destruction of it all. Like how you ended this
poem though she is gone her footprints shall lead you to self destruction.
well done Best of luck to you in the contest.
Warm thoughts.
Froznetearz -
Brilliantly written. Love it.
Lil
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I looked at it in this light at first and couldn't come up with anything...you did really well
Simon -
wow great write.. i could really feel this... thanks for sharing and gooooood luck in contest...! hugs as well...
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