Child so young,
so delicate
Child runs and plays,
loves not hates
Little baby girl
Her name is Hailey,little baby
she was gentle and she didn't like pain
no pain
(hanged a teddy bear)
watching her cartoons
Evil came in, chills down her spin
She was so young and unaware
That this evil was evil to her
he came in
he came in through the door
Black paint
Black paint all over is unworthy hands
Disgusting, sickening
What The Fuck you Doing?
She was scared she was unaware
Child was so young, so unaware
Unaware that he left her there to hurt
All by herself he said not to tell
Secret, or he'll do it again
She sat there crieing
Evil had left the room
He came in
he came in through the door
Black paint...she was covered in his...
Black Paint
Hanged a teddy bear!
Hanged a Teddy Bear!
Hanged a Teddy Bear!!
Black Paint
It Hanged The Teddy Bear!!!
Author notes
ugh this sucked, it was an atempt to write a song kinda thing and i used your contest as my expieriment, sorry if its not good
A contest entry
- She Stopped Playing With Me... by The Cube.
300 points, ended May 6, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poet's Choice III by Luna Tique Fringe.
1750 points, ended May 25, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A little awkward and choppy...but according to your author notes, you didn't like it either. You didn't care enough to fix it up, why should I?
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I can help you write songs if you ever do need help...but this is frickin' awesome...scary and chilling! Not bad for a first time song!!!
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This was good. It's a good tie between life and the picture's description. A little off from what I wanted but I did like it.
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Wow, this is pretty deep and scary. I like the darkness in this, especially contrasted to the light of a child. Wonderful, I like it.
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