from heaven's door
you enter my world
like an Angel
falling in grace
abounding the shore
in eagle form
I hear a whisper
calling my name
looking, all around
yet it is wrapped inside
locked away, awaiting the key
only you can reach inside
to find where it is
to unlock my secret,
then the song shall be sung
for the flamingo awaits
you, to tame the flame
come won't you set me free
to sing...
Is this believable
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I like the use of flamingo and flame in this poem - very nice alliteration too. A lovely song or call to sing you've written here, Tamara.
I can't think to which contest of mine you're refering too as I've never deleted any of my 60 contests, and I also see that I haven't commented on this poem before - I always comment on all my contest entries. So perhaps it was for a contest where i was only the co-judges or host, Tamara.
~ Nicolette
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Interesting. Especially the reoccurring motif of birds. Typically a symbol of feminine freedom. Good way to describe with out using that god-damn word. Solid write.
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its pretty good, the one thing i didnt like was the broken flow of the poem for some poems it works but this one would be better if it all flowed together any way its a ok poem
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nice write. the song shall be heard, I like the use of the flamingo, good title.
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"like an Angel
falling in grace"
I love this line, the twist on the usual line of fallen from grace. The last two lines are very nice as well, they tie the poem together beautifully. Great write, I enjoyed reading this.
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I like how you used two different kinds of birds to discribe the person. Gave them the characteristics of being Stong and Graceful.
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Very good write. Flamingo is a beautiful pink bird.
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You can wait a lifetime for that key, or it can enter your heart unknowingly. Too many never find it. You have penned a lovely piece from your newly opened heart!
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yeah we can wait a lifetime to find it or let it jump in our lap when we were never looking, LOL
I am glad you liked the poem, thank for the visit.
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A beautiful write, but the flamingo threw me off. I was thinking beautiful, sensual, a beach maybe. Then you threw in a big pink bird and I was kerbobbled!
A cute write beyond that. Well done
Spreading some love,
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I consider the pink flamingo the most exotic creature maybe tied with the peacock. But I thank you for you visit and enjoying this piece.
Tamara
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Lovely Poem
Hi Tamara,
You have combined love and nature so well within your words. Lovely imagery to fill the readers mind. I think we all l;ook for that special one to open our hearts and let love fly free. Thank you for sharing. Take care.
bless You,
Sandy
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hey Sandy, so good to see you enjoying my poem, thanks for the visit. Be blessed in all you accomplish today.
Tamara
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Nice
A huge stack of metaphors, all trying to express what you want. Needing so many metaphors, because it's something that's impossible to say. No spelling mistakes spotted. Beautiful.
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thanks, you make it bigger than life LOL
Tamara
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