REIGN
You awake early each morning golden and fresh
to find that I have risen and waited to take breakfast with you.
Your favorite cup on the table,
the coffee brewed and waiting warmly.
Through silences and conversations we share our joys
and troubles.
Neither of us question what lies uneasily upon the ledges
in the windows of our eyes...
within sight but untouchable.
So I bury myself in my work.
Until one day you bring to the cottage a "friend."
In the evening as if on cue I go for a walk
though there may be rain. You look at me
sheepishly, hoping that I will just go to my room
and meditate...
Or whatever it is that you think that I do when I am alone.
I tell you that the rain is refreshing...
Do you know why?
No?!? In the rain I can cry...
tears unseen are blended into billions
upon billions of rain drops all running lightly upon my cheeks.
In the rain I can let my pain show and you will never know.
In my solitude I tell myself that even the sky is sad.
That she shares her tears with me.
Together we relieve pressures held within to long.
Today though I shall not walk.
There are windows I wish to open...
thoughts and feelings which need aired.
The rain she beckons me onward...
but tonight I will send another into her embrace.
Author notes
This poem has actually been printed in a fanzine. Option is the one about writing about storms. Author is trekkergirl.
In a list
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A contest entry
- ~ When Rain Falls~ Prompt by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended August 21, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Forgiving is a part of life by Writing0Freedom.
400 points, ended November 21, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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By now you know how much I Truly Love The Rain (since I even made a group by the same name) and how this is written can be in the same caategory. Congrats on getting it published and the Honorable Mention.
Ted E
PS: Saw the link on one of the comments for the Rain Goddess contest and thought I would check it out
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Love what you are attempting to do in the poem, there are spots of brilliance. Especially in the 2nd verse. I would really like to see you rewrite, going with just the images, more or less toning it up eliminating unnecessary wordage. It definitely has promises of greatness. If you would like I would love to work with you on it and see what you could do, if not I understand that, too. Do message me though if you are interested. Congrats on the HM. At least my brain is starting to kick back in, unfortunately my body is lagging behind. My best, your friend and fellow rain lover.
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Wow
Loved the depth and story to this one. Brilliantly penned.
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I like it , I really like all the emotion and the beautiful imagery. I love the last stanza and the third to last stanza, both are very beautiful. Thank you for entering!
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Rain is refreshing and it brings on the soul searching as Tearz said. I find myself with lots of emotions on rainy days. Thanks for entering and I like the journey through your words.
Best wishes,
Frogz~ -
Sometimes rainy days bring along a little soul searching as in this poem
Thanks for joining in warm thoughts.
Frozentearz -
DEEP!
I like to think of the rain as God's tears. You certainly conveyed something similar to that in this one. Fine work.
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Your comments on my poem REIGN
Glad you liked this one. It was actually written at work with two of my friends. We worked for days on it. My friend brenda said this was my stormy period cuz all I wrote during that time had storms involved in them in one way or another.
This poem ended up being printed later in another fanzine.
Though everyone thinks that the title is misspelled and should be written as RAIN it really isn't. We decided to title it REIGN because we wanted it to come across as someone reigning in their emotions. Taking control and getting what they want out of life. Not sitting back and just watching it go by.
Glad that you liked it. And I liked the part about the tears falling and no one could tell cuz it would be blended in the rain.
And how the rain was referred to as a character too...
I personally have strong feelings for this poem.
thanks for taking the time out to read it and comment.
Hugs,
trekkergirl
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