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Breaking Point

"Virus!"
"Freak!"
"Go off youself!"
The laughter in my ears
Ringing, ringing
all the time
feeding on my fears

Poking
stabbing
Making holes
for years and years
I took it
Took it all my life
surpressing my hidden tears

Crouch in the corner
Knees up to my chest
Parents yelling
Calling me a failure
They have no idea
They say highschool is easy
But they haven't seen
The torture
the cuts
I'm given everyday.

But now
Now!
Ha,ha,
I'll have my peace!
Pain is bitter
revenge is sweet.
Sweeter than the life I own

The price they'll pay
They'll give away
What they took from me.
The breaking point is broken
My mind is all but gone
But I don't care
I'll make it fair
Insanity is nothing
Compared to what they'll face.

I snapped and in the end
it was all worth while.
Now I laugh
at the sweet, sweet memories
The bullies on the floor
Blood in the moonlight
A pleasent sight
The breaking point is gone.


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  • Moon Raven
    April 30, 2008
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    Now that's what I'm looking for! Very well worded! The flow and imagery and feel of this poem puts a smile upon my lips. The insanity overflowing from this poem feels like my own; my own revenge. Your poem wrapped me up and kept me interested and longing for more. Amazing job!